改寫練手【第1期】

作為改寫區的版主，要好好給大家服務，嘿嘿嘿
現在定期發一些句子，大家自己先改改，
然後下一期會發前一期我改寫的版本
當然提供的改寫會是通過copyscape檢測的
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每期3小段
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1. I have medium/long straight hair, and I have tried to achieve curls (or at least waves) for YEARS with no luck. I can't seem to figure out hot rollers to save my life, and I always get weird kinks in my hair when I try using regular curling irons. Plus, that just gives me tight "Shirley Temple" curls which isn't really the look I want.

2. After years of distrust, China's government says it wants a new type of great power relationship with the United States. Chinese President Xi Jinping will begin trying to lay the groundwork Friday at a summit with President Obama in California, but just what kind of relationship does Xi want?

. v- Q) M; z: a1 ]* i5 h+ h3. They include a slowing economic growth rate, a smarter, more critical public, some terrifying environmental problems and a general uncertainty on how the Communist Party will keep China's spectacular rise on track.
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看著簡單句很多,但是個人詞彙量太少,改起來還是力不從心,
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實例出現眼前，突然發現不知道怎麼改，無從下手額
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9 E( Q- s/ A9 ~% P& q* Y7 u# s/ rIn recent years, I've been looking for a solution to make my straight hair curly or even waves. However, it seems to me there isn't an easy way to achieve that. I've tried hot rollers but it simply didn't work for me. I've spent a fair amount of money in curling iron tools but as a result, my hair turned kinky instead. To be specific, the outcome of using curling iron is kind of like Shirley Temple curls but it's not what I'm looking for.
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8 n% }( ]1 C! J# w哥的英語,雖然不夠正宗, 但還算不錯吧?

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luguokankan 發表於 2013-6-8 22:17
In recent years, I've been looking for a solution to make my straight hair curly or even waves. Howe ...

很厲害 除了 waves 考慮改為 wavy
9 }& A$ x! f; S& q( A8 D2 K) s; E其它都很棒！ 功力很不錯，要不試一試後面兩句？
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luguokankan 發表於 2013-6-8 22:17
In recent years, I've been looking for a solution to make my straight hair curly or even waves. Howe ...

！❤❤
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luguokankan 發表於 2013-6-8 22:17
- p$ a8 l0 ^% J# V! j* ]4 h7 YIn recent years, I've been looking for a solution to make my straight hair curly or even waves. Howe ...

英文比不上你了，搜句日文。。。不要告訴我你日語也很好~

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看了後表示茫然不知所措，哎，英語，硬傷啊。
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好吧。。。。這麼好的欄目，不只是我一個人心生膽怯了。
樂樂版主~~~ 我來捧捧場，不管寫得好不好，都給俺多加幾分，鼓勵鼓勵唄~~~
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: E5 P, G1 f1 m2 z2. The Chinese government is calling for a brand new great power relationship with the United States. After years of tension, the problem is how to manage the distrust between the two countries.  Xi Jingping, the Chinese chairman, is going to push the start with President Obama on Friday's summit, in California, although it's still ambiguous what he means by putting forward this idea.

3. Ahead of the Communist party lay numerous challenges: How to boost economic growth? How to deal with the horrific environment? ? How to propose a more open and diverse society? And, of course, how to maintain a smarter and more critical public image, which people can have faith in.
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第一個就不改寫啦~~~ 免得和前一個改寫產生鮮明的對比！
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只看懂八成，要改還路            長的呢