lelegai和dofast

我來給你說說吧！
8 n$ o! H9 D! n; Q/ I首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
Dofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教程+翻譯工具，基本上你能翻譯出，甚至是寫出基本上無語法錯誤的句子。
9 C  y) w4 l% Y1 |: [9 \) p( K7 z8 N- z關於樂樂改寫，這個也是個很好的教程，首先你可以學習到改寫，並且能改出很好的文章。
其次這個不單單是改寫的教程，它甚至有很多方面都能延伸，至於延伸不多說，自己去延伸，嘿嘿！
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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
" e8 f/ m5 B8 M4 \6 }8 Q0 JBecause of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

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Because of their tiny size, parents should choose a car seat carefully that will cater to the needs of a preemie.

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Because of their size which are tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.

這裡是我在教程中提到過，形容詞變定語從句，一定要加點料，
: J9 s1 i% e4 ~' m. J: N' A) T! M因為是第一次改，所以他沒注意，
你看，我稍微加一個單詞
. W4 h6 l, A! B4 s$ B# `0 yBecause of their size which is comparatively tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
" n- }8 _/ _. a就自然了。
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aicheng262 發表於 2013-10-29 23:34
我來給你說說吧！
首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
Dofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教 ...

原文：
  d2 u' e& n$ ?( `3 e" iIf needed, a small, rolled towel can be used to fill in any small spaces between the crotch strap and the baby to provide a snug fit.
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學員改寫：
! ^+ o/ h2 B; g' P0 p/ jYou can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces which is small between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
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  c" o0 e" X# x& `, K同樣問題也是出在形容詞轉定語從句
他是看完教程第一次改寫，所以這個點還沒有掌握太好
2 }5 P3 M! e' u) t5 X* H樂樂改專門支持論壇，可以免費給他提供點評服務的
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You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces that is not so big between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
就再次變得自然了
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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
- S* s, d; f) T( d1 f" V6 tBecause of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

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Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the baby's head from rolling around during transport.

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$ y9 Z+ l3 d- {7 O4 ^what baby support cushions have is cradle the body while supporting effectively for the baby head can keep your baby's head safe from rolling around during transport in your car.

3 e& O1 e5 ~# ^這裡屬於原文稍微難一點，因為較長
, w* z3 Y8 ^. i0 b* T# o  Z' EA can keep B from doing C
A = Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head
B = the baby's head
7 }9 u. [! }+ j# j3 T9 Q. l# ndoing C = rolling around during transport

" u$ t" d6 ^" l但是學員思路是挺好的，我們繼續按照此思路改寫
  G. k7 D* E  c3 ]% B0 zWhat we have is the baby support cushions cradling the body that can keep the baby's head from rolling around by supporting it during transport.
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* D* j% s" @0 O: d, l6 l( }1 Z這裡的改寫方法都是樂樂改寫中提到的，這樣改出的句子，可讀性可以和原文對照，基本是一致的，但更核心問題是 樂樂改寫方法，保護了文章內最要的東西，也就是很多自己改寫時候忽略掉的。。。
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樂樂  2013.10.30我已經讓樓主免費學習dofast了 如果滿意 他就付費繼續學習lelegai 如果不滿意什麼都不損失，不過希望樓主能在這裡回復一下感受

那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

a64913444 發表於 2013-10-30 11:44
, O8 l3 Y' n9 h9 W0 v那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

. P+ |' `4 g  D# i5 ^8 Y是這樣的，樂樂老師昨晚說：如果我覺得滿意，那麼需要付1000元購買dofast和lelegai，如果不滿意，則不付錢。因為昨晚有事沒看，今天在單位裡，等我看完後我會把感受寫出來給大家看的。
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樂樂 發表於 2013-10-30 00:20
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( K8 d" s, l* J9 T9 n+ k7 g/ hHaving baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the ba ...

哈哈 原來我的錯誤主要是在定語從句上啊 看來要多複習複習定語從句的用法。which that what 巴拉巴拉的。。。這篇文章是我自己改寫的。是看完樂樂的教程後 馬上去實踐操作的。。樂樂覺得我寫的這篇文章 適合拿來後期的補充培訓。估計我犯的錯誤其他人也會犯 所以就壟斷了我的文章啦。。
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