lelegai和dofast

我來給你說說吧！
首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
Dofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教程+翻譯工具，基本上你能翻譯出，甚至是寫出基本上無語法錯誤的句子。
" Y; i  k# \7 i3 |關於樂樂改寫，這個也是個很好的教程，首先你可以學習到改寫，並且能改出很好的文章。
其次這個不單單是改寫的教程，它甚至有很多方面都能延伸，至於延伸不多說，自己去延伸，嘿嘿！
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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
( b# D+ P' R( |Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

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  Q+ Y9 h8 P7 g" |Because of their tiny size, parents should choose a car seat carefully that will cater to the needs of a preemie.
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學員改寫：
5 C9 ~* N9 E' r8 n! ?; s  c7 TBecause of their size which are tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
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* v, t' i0 `" r8 H5 R8 \4 n9 {/ O6 e+ f這裡是我在教程中提到過，形容詞變定語從句，一定要加點料，
因為是第一次改，所以他沒注意，
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Because of their size which is comparatively tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
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aicheng262 發表於 2013-10-29 23:34
我來給你說說吧！
+ R8 J' U2 t! y0 G1 x) y8 [% W" Z首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
& B4 z" ]/ K  Y6 H$ aDofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教 ...

原文：
If needed, a small, rolled towel can be used to fill in any small spaces between the crotch strap and the baby to provide a snug fit.
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學員改寫：
/ k5 ]5 x6 e* h1 V! kYou can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces which is small between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
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6 k; r% j! C* E% n同樣問題也是出在形容詞轉定語從句
他是看完教程第一次改寫，所以這個點還沒有掌握太好
  C3 t  q) H3 I5 i5 w1 B樂樂改專門支持論壇，可以免費給他提供點評服務的
稍微加一點料
You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces that is not so big between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
$ \. G1 p3 @) n; XBecause of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

原文：
; \9 N* @6 t* x& k( e' }Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the baby's head from rolling around during transport.

學員改寫：
. {! R, f% r: V, O, Uwhat baby support cushions have is cradle the body while supporting effectively for the baby head can keep your baby's head safe from rolling around during transport in your car.
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A can keep B from doing C
" I: N7 f# m9 _9 f! y5 v& oA = Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head
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5 S" t! y2 ^- }' s/ }' _doing C = rolling around during transport

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What we have is the baby support cushions cradling the body that can keep the baby's head from rolling around by supporting it during transport.
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2 I; k$ \" r/ e, N這裡的改寫方法都是樂樂改寫中提到的，這樣改出的句子，可讀性可以和原文對照，基本是一致的，但更核心問題是 樂樂改寫方法，保護了文章內最要的東西，也就是很多自己改寫時候忽略掉的。。。
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樂樂  2013.10.30我已經讓樓主免費學習dofast了 如果滿意 他就付費繼續學習lelegai 如果不滿意什麼都不損失，不過希望樓主能在這裡回復一下感受

; H1 q7 e+ b* r; K' B那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

a64913444 發表於 2013-10-30 11:44
那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

4 g  k6 z1 v( g$ j是這樣的，樂樂老師昨晚說：如果我覺得滿意，那麼需要付1000元購買dofast和lelegai，如果不滿意，則不付錢。因為昨晚有事沒看，今天在單位裡，等我看完後我會把感受寫出來給大家看的。

樂樂 發表於 2013-10-30 00:20
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; @. i+ s8 o0 I+ i7 ~2 q! F# NHaving baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the ba ...

哈哈 原來我的錯誤主要是在定語從句上啊 看來要多複習複習定語從句的用法。which that what 巴拉巴拉的。。。這篇文章是我自己改寫的。是看完樂樂的教程後 馬上去實踐操作的。。樂樂覺得我寫的這篇文章 適合拿來後期的補充培訓。估計我犯的錯誤其他人也會犯 所以就壟斷了我的文章啦。。

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