lelegai和dofast

我來給你說說吧！
首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
Dofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教程+翻譯工具，基本上你能翻譯出，甚至是寫出基本上無語法錯誤的句子。
關於樂樂改寫，這個也是個很好的教程，首先你可以學習到改寫，並且能改出很好的文章。
4 m# p$ [/ G- ~( z$ r$ `7 f. j其次這個不單單是改寫的教程，它甚至有很多方面都能延伸，至於延伸不多說，自己去延伸，嘿嘿！

自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

原文：
Because of their tiny size, parents should choose a car seat carefully that will cater to the needs of a preemie.

學員改寫：
Because of their size which are tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
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: L+ {- p! p- Z8 T3 v3 O這裡是我在教程中提到過，形容詞變定語從句，一定要加點料，
6 `2 e2 w# B' c0 J! @2 z. f" U3 y3 i因為是第一次改，所以他沒注意，
你看，我稍微加一個單詞
* S0 h$ a' A$ ~/ ~0 aBecause of their size which is comparatively tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
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aicheng262 發表於 2013-10-29 23:34
2 ?" `  O! s! r* d8 S, q我來給你說說吧！
4 X0 t! Y* h  _8 k! Y首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
Dofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教 ...

' E6 |  m" m. ]# X8 [原文：
# B- v( I) {. S5 OIf needed, a small, rolled towel can be used to fill in any small spaces between the crotch strap and the baby to provide a snug fit.
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, ?* y, N( M+ L. a4 c* t+ SYou can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces which is small between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.

) Y1 G& b) h: W; @8 r同樣問題也是出在形容詞轉定語從句
2 @( ~" w2 o3 j) G, k) t他是看完教程第一次改寫，所以這個點還沒有掌握太好
- r5 r: F, a1 `0 P- u' a樂樂改專門支持論壇，可以免費給他提供點評服務的
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You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces that is not so big between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

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Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the baby's head from rolling around during transport.
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what baby support cushions have is cradle the body while supporting effectively for the baby head can keep your baby's head safe from rolling around during transport in your car.
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這裡屬於原文稍微難一點，因為較長
A can keep B from doing C
; d0 q' \, M0 HA = Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head
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doing C = rolling around during transport
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9 F$ X8 \9 F7 e- u1 V但是學員思路是挺好的，我們繼續按照此思路改寫
3 h+ f) e, |) q  o5 t5 p. y# {What we have is the baby support cushions cradling the body that can keep the baby's head from rolling around by supporting it during transport.

/ g! T, D6 O0 n8 z. i這裡的改寫方法都是樂樂改寫中提到的，這樣改出的句子，可讀性可以和原文對照，基本是一致的，但更核心問題是 樂樂改寫方法，保護了文章內最要的東西，也就是很多自己改寫時候忽略掉的。。。
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樂樂  2013.10.30我已經讓樓主免費學習dofast了 如果滿意 他就付費繼續學習lelegai 如果不滿意什麼都不損失，不過希望樓主能在這裡回復一下感受

那不是只用付lelegai呢。。
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a64913444 發表於 2013-10-30 11:44
那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

% Q' d7 ^' ~/ I7 f5 ?是這樣的，樂樂老師昨晚說：如果我覺得滿意，那麼需要付1000元購買dofast和lelegai，如果不滿意，則不付錢。因為昨晚有事沒看，今天在單位裡，等我看完後我會把感受寫出來給大家看的。

樂樂 發表於 2013-10-30 00:20
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Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the ba ...

哈哈 原來我的錯誤主要是在定語從句上啊 看來要多複習複習定語從句的用法。which that what 巴拉巴拉的。。。這篇文章是我自己改寫的。是看完樂樂的教程後 馬上去實踐操作的。。樂樂覺得我寫的這篇文章 適合拿來後期的補充培訓。估計我犯的錯誤其他人也會犯 所以就壟斷了我的文章啦。。

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