lelegai和dofast

我來給你說說吧！
首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
; V) k  j/ w  PDofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教程+翻譯工具，基本上你能翻譯出，甚至是寫出基本上無語法錯誤的句子。
關於樂樂改寫，這個也是個很好的教程，首先你可以學習到改寫，並且能改出很好的文章。
其次這個不單單是改寫的教程，它甚至有很多方面都能延伸，至於延伸不多說，自己去延伸，嘿嘿！
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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
% {1 h! b5 S6 p: V4 ~Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

原文：
# t) Y8 v! A5 Z1 v! B: jBecause of their tiny size, parents should choose a car seat carefully that will cater to the needs of a preemie.
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- V, i9 u% b7 \8 yBecause of their size which are tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.

. [$ h# M3 A" v. G) ]/ Z這裡是我在教程中提到過，形容詞變定語從句，一定要加點料，
因為是第一次改，所以他沒注意，
0 J0 [2 e/ d0 T* @你看，我稍微加一個單詞
1 i5 n% _% e/ u* m3 k5 y' Z8 f5 WBecause of their size which is comparatively tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
就自然了。

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aicheng262 發表於 2013-10-29 23:34
我來給你說說吧！
首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
Dofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教 ...

原文：
If needed, a small, rolled towel can be used to fill in any small spaces between the crotch strap and the baby to provide a snug fit.
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& z+ W1 o. k8 S5 P/ Z! c7 OYou can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces which is small between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.

9 |( g. g6 K* p5 O9 Q! h5 d3 A' K同樣問題也是出在形容詞轉定語從句
他是看完教程第一次改寫，所以這個點還沒有掌握太好
( ~; ~% f, p! n樂樂改專門支持論壇，可以免費給他提供點評服務的
稍微加一點料
* \' {' W6 }8 ?) N* _' pYou can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces that is not so big between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
就再次變得自然了

自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
% \- F! G$ i- y$ c$ \" @& iBecause of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

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& @- l3 g7 b- Y' J4 {" hHaving baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the baby's head from rolling around during transport.
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學員改寫：
5 k6 I, _2 Z' d5 O+ Hwhat baby support cushions have is cradle the body while supporting effectively for the baby head can keep your baby's head safe from rolling around during transport in your car.

0 z' E3 S& k& l$ r+ M( a這裡屬於原文稍微難一點，因為較長
A can keep B from doing C
/ t0 @, u0 |  v8 mA = Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head
B = the baby's head
doing C = rolling around during transport
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但是學員思路是挺好的，我們繼續按照此思路改寫
! }8 n, L6 P1 O" h% a  Q2 dWhat we have is the baby support cushions cradling the body that can keep the baby's head from rolling around by supporting it during transport.

! Z( j8 m7 v. G5 s這裡的改寫方法都是樂樂改寫中提到的，這樣改出的句子，可讀性可以和原文對照，基本是一致的，但更核心問題是 樂樂改寫方法，保護了文章內最要的東西，也就是很多自己改寫時候忽略掉的。。。
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樂樂  2013.10.30我已經讓樓主免費學習dofast了 如果滿意 他就付費繼續學習lelegai 如果不滿意什麼都不損失，不過希望樓主能在這裡回復一下感受

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a64913444 發表於 2013-10-30 11:44
( O& b" x. y' ~, j3 B$ z那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

, F$ C, W: _6 n6 `' U; B是這樣的，樂樂老師昨晚說：如果我覺得滿意，那麼需要付1000元購買dofast和lelegai，如果不滿意，則不付錢。因為昨晚有事沒看，今天在單位裡，等我看完後我會把感受寫出來給大家看的。
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樂樂 發表於 2013-10-30 00:20
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: ?. y' [9 p' H# g$ dHaving baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the ba ...

哈哈 原來我的錯誤主要是在定語從句上啊 看來要多複習複習定語從句的用法。which that what 巴拉巴拉的。。。這篇文章是我自己改寫的。是看完樂樂的教程後 馬上去實踐操作的。。樂樂覺得我寫的這篇文章 適合拿來後期的補充培訓。估計我犯的錯誤其他人也會犯 所以就壟斷了我的文章啦。。

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