自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42 
# w" S. k8 w0 c* g [Because of their size which are tiny, in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ... 0 C3 D. \ K+ x9 d% r# Q
原文:
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what baby support cushions have is cradle the body while supporting effectively for the baby head can keep your baby's head safe from rolling around during transport in your car.
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這裡屬於原文稍微難一點,因為較長
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A = Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head
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doing C = rolling around during transport! w2 Y( z' @& V9 J" Y5 ^
0 E4 j2 T* S' j但是學員思路是挺好的,我們繼續按照此思路改寫
5 ^$ R! j* u( e# X' Y# S- M @What we have is the baby support cushions cradling the body that can keep the baby's head from rolling around by supporting it during transport./ b: o- Z# W, E8 \
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這裡的改寫方法都是樂樂改寫中提到的,這樣改出的句子,可讀性可以和原文對照,基本是一致的,但更核心問題是 樂樂改寫方法,保護了文章內最要的東西,也就是很多自己改寫時候忽略掉的。。。2 _* Q3 g/ c/ F& x* V( j* @
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