自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42 
. P, c# |" R& n* c; OBecause of their size which are tiny, in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...
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# W7 p% _ D6 V* ~$ W3 `Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the baby's head from rolling around during transport.
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f' [7 H6 S4 {) E. G( z0 Bwhat baby support cushions have is cradle the body while supporting effectively for the baby head can keep your baby's head safe from rolling around during transport in your car.6 S/ V/ @& _" v( I0 {+ ^ w
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這裡屬於原文稍微難一點,因為較長
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A = Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head; E3 Z, {* p' m, }. G
B = the baby's head
6 a, G' R7 l; j' wdoing C = rolling around during transport
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" r% k7 Y5 s3 p) z- K但是學員思路是挺好的,我們繼續按照此思路改寫
# q9 f! k# W, i& \3 rWhat we have is the baby support cushions cradling the body that can keep the baby's head from rolling around by supporting it during transport.
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這裡的改寫方法都是樂樂改寫中提到的,這樣改出的句子,可讀性可以和原文對照,基本是一致的,但更核心問題是 樂樂改寫方法,保護了文章內最要的東西,也就是很多自己改寫時候忽略掉的。。。
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