lelegai和dofast

我來給你說說吧！
首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
Dofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教程+翻譯工具，基本上你能翻譯出，甚至是寫出基本上無語法錯誤的句子。
9 O1 w0 v5 ?: S' q5 E) F& }關於樂樂改寫，這個也是個很好的教程，首先你可以學習到改寫，並且能改出很好的文章。
其次這個不單單是改寫的教程，它甚至有很多方面都能延伸，至於延伸不多說，自己去延伸，嘿嘿！

自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

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Because of their tiny size, parents should choose a car seat carefully that will cater to the needs of a preemie.

學員改寫：
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. ~) ^8 `, X7 }5 w7 n  @6 R) R0 c這裡是我在教程中提到過，形容詞變定語從句，一定要加點料，
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你看，我稍微加一個單詞
Because of their size which is comparatively tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
就自然了。
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aicheng262 發表於 2013-10-29 23:34
9 G: |3 k7 N9 P9 s& @, i% C我來給你說說吧！
; O. p4 z, D% k8 L: Z8 B首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
  h, L6 Y  X# |1 {8 {Dofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教 ...

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3 O. G" n/ n# K# B7 U8 j# Q. IIf needed, a small, rolled towel can be used to fill in any small spaces between the crotch strap and the baby to provide a snug fit.

學員改寫：
You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces which is small between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.

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他是看完教程第一次改寫，所以這個點還沒有掌握太好
樂樂改專門支持論壇，可以免費給他提供點評服務的
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You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces that is not so big between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
就再次變得自然了
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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

原文：
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what baby support cushions have is cradle the body while supporting effectively for the baby head can keep your baby's head safe from rolling around during transport in your car.
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這裡屬於原文稍微難一點，因為較長
A can keep B from doing C
: b+ X! G" W& IA = Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head
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doing C = rolling around during transport
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' w! w0 w2 u- n: u# n! y' T但是學員思路是挺好的，我們繼續按照此思路改寫
What we have is the baby support cushions cradling the body that can keep the baby's head from rolling around by supporting it during transport.
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樂樂  2013.10.30我已經讓樓主免費學習dofast了 如果滿意 他就付費繼續學習lelegai 如果不滿意什麼都不損失，不過希望樓主能在這裡回復一下感受

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a64913444 發表於 2013-10-30 11:44
那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

是這樣的，樂樂老師昨晚說：如果我覺得滿意，那麼需要付1000元購買dofast和lelegai，如果不滿意，則不付錢。因為昨晚有事沒看，今天在單位裡，等我看完後我會把感受寫出來給大家看的。
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樂樂 發表於 2013-10-30 00:20
原文：
. E7 U4 z( L+ @0 q7 c. VHaving baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the ba ...

4 |4 ~: N5 k8 m( H" P' w  |哈哈 原來我的錯誤主要是在定語從句上啊 看來要多複習複習定語從句的用法。which that what 巴拉巴拉的。。。這篇文章是我自己改寫的。是看完樂樂的教程後 馬上去實踐操作的。。樂樂覺得我寫的這篇文章 適合拿來後期的補充培訓。估計我犯的錯誤其他人也會犯 所以就壟斷了我的文章啦。。

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