lelegai和dofast

我來給你說說吧！
首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
. M. s8 ?3 q" i- x8 J/ {Dofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教程+翻譯工具，基本上你能翻譯出，甚至是寫出基本上無語法錯誤的句子。
9 I: B4 J% j" a' A5 b關於樂樂改寫，這個也是個很好的教程，首先你可以學習到改寫，並且能改出很好的文章。
8 H8 ~0 ?8 j; ?- a其次這個不單單是改寫的教程，它甚至有很多方面都能延伸，至於延伸不多說，自己去延伸，嘿嘿！

自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
+ B) Y; H3 p& R) b8 [Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

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4 C" \8 q& l1 O* D3 ?Because of their tiny size, parents should choose a car seat carefully that will cater to the needs of a preemie.

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* q) i: N0 d; y7 d' P0 M4 \% `Because of their size which are tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.

" f9 q/ _& I+ E1 o( W5 g" A' o' _這裡是我在教程中提到過，形容詞變定語從句，一定要加點料，
! f- a4 n  p& X因為是第一次改，所以他沒注意，
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Because of their size which is comparatively tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
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aicheng262 發表於 2013-10-29 23:34
我來給你說說吧！
首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
Dofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教 ...

9 d; ?5 k; C" _, W9 d原文：
! {4 W1 f2 b3 G9 V4 bIf needed, a small, rolled towel can be used to fill in any small spaces between the crotch strap and the baby to provide a snug fit.

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' r$ s" J$ P( S1 ?/ s1 KYou can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces which is small between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.

同樣問題也是出在形容詞轉定語從句
% l9 [( t  ^0 [+ V& o5 O; g他是看完教程第一次改寫，所以這個點還沒有掌握太好
( `  w  s+ D1 j: a  c: n樂樂改專門支持論壇，可以免費給他提供點評服務的
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You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces that is not so big between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
4 f' A( s. T& L& r! e就再次變得自然了

自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
: z$ G* I1 V4 H! nBecause of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

原文：
6 r% u* a9 X- B5 {5 |' G- jHaving baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the baby's head from rolling around during transport.
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what baby support cushions have is cradle the body while supporting effectively for the baby head can keep your baby's head safe from rolling around during transport in your car.
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, L: K+ r; w1 J+ \這裡屬於原文稍微難一點，因為較長
A can keep B from doing C
% V, H" w4 I; G4 z. F* yA = Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head
, r: H7 |/ d9 k8 r" t: tB = the baby's head
) h+ Y0 p, j$ R" @$ _/ ?+ E. e6 @doing C = rolling around during transport
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0 [6 n7 l+ f7 w( Z( j1 F但是學員思路是挺好的，我們繼續按照此思路改寫
What we have is the baby support cushions cradling the body that can keep the baby's head from rolling around by supporting it during transport.
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' ~7 e, S1 H8 i2 w5 ]/ A這裡的改寫方法都是樂樂改寫中提到的，這樣改出的句子，可讀性可以和原文對照，基本是一致的，但更核心問題是 樂樂改寫方法，保護了文章內最要的東西，也就是很多自己改寫時候忽略掉的。。。

樂樂  2013.10.30我已經讓樓主免費學習dofast了 如果滿意 他就付費繼續學習lelegai 如果不滿意什麼都不損失，不過希望樓主能在這裡回復一下感受

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那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

a64913444 發表於 2013-10-30 11:44
那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

& t* K  J! s$ N是這樣的，樂樂老師昨晚說：如果我覺得滿意，那麼需要付1000元購買dofast和lelegai，如果不滿意，則不付錢。因為昨晚有事沒看，今天在單位裡，等我看完後我會把感受寫出來給大家看的。
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樂樂 發表於 2013-10-30 00:20
原文：
& L  k! N* \# \! C1 t! X8 }5 D# vHaving baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the ba ...

/ V6 U$ L  k" W+ b; [5 r8 I5 ]& W哈哈 原來我的錯誤主要是在定語從句上啊 看來要多複習複習定語從句的用法。which that what 巴拉巴拉的。。。這篇文章是我自己改寫的。是看完樂樂的教程後 馬上去實踐操作的。。樂樂覺得我寫的這篇文章 適合拿來後期的補充培訓。估計我犯的錯誤其他人也會犯 所以就壟斷了我的文章啦。。

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