lelegai和dofast

我來給你說說吧！
3 {4 f+ p, L& q7 X2 Y. J首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
Dofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教程+翻譯工具，基本上你能翻譯出，甚至是寫出基本上無語法錯誤的句子。
1 g9 |5 N8 t. [8 ?. d關於樂樂改寫，這個也是個很好的教程，首先你可以學習到改寫，並且能改出很好的文章。
2 `: W6 d) P7 F6 V% b& y其次這個不單單是改寫的教程，它甚至有很多方面都能延伸，至於延伸不多說，自己去延伸，嘿嘿！

自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

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Because of their tiny size, parents should choose a car seat carefully that will cater to the needs of a preemie.

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# G9 u, @5 @2 i. E8 tBecause of their size which are tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.

3 t" e4 {: \' x" K2 j9 H4 n2 q這裡是我在教程中提到過，形容詞變定語從句，一定要加點料，
/ f+ V# _+ _) b1 f; L, W因為是第一次改，所以他沒注意，
2 m0 m0 i) _/ T" B; `8 O你看，我稍微加一個單詞
Because of their size which is comparatively tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
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aicheng262 發表於 2013-10-29 23:34
我來給你說說吧！
首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
0 v: m  |/ E7 U8 P* s0 H. zDofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教 ...

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6 M8 n6 i1 `) `; _If needed, a small, rolled towel can be used to fill in any small spaces between the crotch strap and the baby to provide a snug fit.
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You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces which is small between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
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同樣問題也是出在形容詞轉定語從句
/ t  ~, ~9 ]! I2 w# v) a) y( n他是看完教程第一次改寫，所以這個點還沒有掌握太好
樂樂改專門支持論壇，可以免費給他提供點評服務的
稍微加一點料
& G; Q7 r2 D4 ~' \! ^, ~8 MYou can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces that is not so big between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
就再次變得自然了

自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

原文：
/ V2 l4 a! h: Q' VHaving baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the baby's head from rolling around during transport.

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5 }: ~2 F4 c' H  _what baby support cushions have is cradle the body while supporting effectively for the baby head can keep your baby's head safe from rolling around during transport in your car.
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2 y' d3 h" y0 d' L6 M0 {$ r/ n這裡屬於原文稍微難一點，因為較長
A can keep B from doing C
A = Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head
8 A: B  X! ^8 q( v* RB = the baby's head
: ^' n: A. E; ~/ bdoing C = rolling around during transport
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, p$ Z  D- y) O2 P- b但是學員思路是挺好的，我們繼續按照此思路改寫
9 v2 ^2 j4 p" C) W8 pWhat we have is the baby support cushions cradling the body that can keep the baby's head from rolling around by supporting it during transport.

這裡的改寫方法都是樂樂改寫中提到的，這樣改出的句子，可讀性可以和原文對照，基本是一致的，但更核心問題是 樂樂改寫方法，保護了文章內最要的東西，也就是很多自己改寫時候忽略掉的。。。

樂樂  2013.10.30我已經讓樓主免費學習dofast了 如果滿意 他就付費繼續學習lelegai 如果不滿意什麼都不損失，不過希望樓主能在這裡回復一下感受

# ]3 s% ]9 W* o那不是只用付lelegai呢。。
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a64913444 發表於 2013-10-30 11:44
. D" c3 r! M) M, j8 p5 r那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

是這樣的，樂樂老師昨晚說：如果我覺得滿意，那麼需要付1000元購買dofast和lelegai，如果不滿意，則不付錢。因為昨晚有事沒看，今天在單位裡，等我看完後我會把感受寫出來給大家看的。

樂樂 發表於 2013-10-30 00:20
4 h" e7 ~7 q0 M; @- w原文：
Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the ba ...

! Q; {8 `& Y  a3 ~5 ~& O哈哈 原來我的錯誤主要是在定語從句上啊 看來要多複習複習定語從句的用法。which that what 巴拉巴拉的。。。這篇文章是我自己改寫的。是看完樂樂的教程後 馬上去實踐操作的。。樂樂覺得我寫的這篇文章 適合拿來後期的補充培訓。估計我犯的錯誤其他人也會犯 所以就壟斷了我的文章啦。。

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