lelegai和dofast

我來給你說說吧！
$ ?$ M* V' l. t) S首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
Dofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教程+翻譯工具，基本上你能翻譯出，甚至是寫出基本上無語法錯誤的句子。
關於樂樂改寫，這個也是個很好的教程，首先你可以學習到改寫，並且能改出很好的文章。
其次這個不單單是改寫的教程，它甚至有很多方面都能延伸，至於延伸不多說，自己去延伸，嘿嘿！

自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
) P! c! ]% X, tBecause of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

原文：
: K1 P' r$ C  GBecause of their tiny size, parents should choose a car seat carefully that will cater to the needs of a preemie.
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9 ~% h+ G3 [5 e, OBecause of their size which are tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
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這裡是我在教程中提到過，形容詞變定語從句，一定要加點料，
3 e1 D' h7 N; i* j  l8 i7 i5 n因為是第一次改，所以他沒注意，
, B7 O5 V& Q8 d0 h你看，我稍微加一個單詞
/ V8 }6 b; o* y4 N8 e. lBecause of their size which is comparatively tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
就自然了。
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aicheng262 發表於 2013-10-29 23:34
* @6 y) ]2 P" Q  v8 q' J我來給你說說吧！
首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
/ g* E. C9 ~. l2 _& B" R) o. HDofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教 ...

原文：
2 F) I1 @2 P! J) o# B& V! hIf needed, a small, rolled towel can be used to fill in any small spaces between the crotch strap and the baby to provide a snug fit.

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You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces which is small between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
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同樣問題也是出在形容詞轉定語從句
他是看完教程第一次改寫，所以這個點還沒有掌握太好
樂樂改專門支持論壇，可以免費給他提供點評服務的
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You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces that is not so big between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
  T% {1 _  Q4 R: `. A( |$ e! u就再次變得自然了
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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

: `( y+ y8 G9 x4 E原文：
2 z. S+ ?' t3 U3 l& m8 \) OHaving baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the baby's head from rolling around during transport.
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學員改寫：
9 e. V0 I8 {* Awhat baby support cushions have is cradle the body while supporting effectively for the baby head can keep your baby's head safe from rolling around during transport in your car.
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7 P6 M; q: C, d4 T  Q這裡屬於原文稍微難一點，因為較長
$ L3 X; v5 b. g" ?$ S6 m. rA can keep B from doing C
- D2 [, r% y- O) j8 G% N' |A = Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head
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但是學員思路是挺好的，我們繼續按照此思路改寫
6 ^# K8 e. ?. z4 [" N5 C5 \What we have is the baby support cushions cradling the body that can keep the baby's head from rolling around by supporting it during transport.

6 ^2 v+ J9 p1 e# r) g' C這裡的改寫方法都是樂樂改寫中提到的，這樣改出的句子，可讀性可以和原文對照，基本是一致的，但更核心問題是 樂樂改寫方法，保護了文章內最要的東西，也就是很多自己改寫時候忽略掉的。。。

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樂樂  2013.10.30我已經讓樓主免費學習dofast了 如果滿意 他就付費繼續學習lelegai 如果不滿意什麼都不損失，不過希望樓主能在這裡回復一下感受

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a64913444 發表於 2013-10-30 11:44
那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

是這樣的，樂樂老師昨晚說：如果我覺得滿意，那麼需要付1000元購買dofast和lelegai，如果不滿意，則不付錢。因為昨晚有事沒看，今天在單位裡，等我看完後我會把感受寫出來給大家看的。

樂樂 發表於 2013-10-30 00:20
- s1 h- I/ v( j4 N* X8 A. p2 B原文：
' ~) y- _' D6 j. l# O* wHaving baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the ba ...

哈哈 原來我的錯誤主要是在定語從句上啊 看來要多複習複習定語從句的用法。which that what 巴拉巴拉的。。。這篇文章是我自己改寫的。是看完樂樂的教程後 馬上去實踐操作的。。樂樂覺得我寫的這篇文章 適合拿來後期的補充培訓。估計我犯的錯誤其他人也會犯 所以就壟斷了我的文章啦。。

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