lelegai和dofast

我來給你說說吧！
首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
- g  `8 W$ |, g; g1 ]Dofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教程+翻譯工具，基本上你能翻譯出，甚至是寫出基本上無語法錯誤的句子。
" b: W; z% v# E+ k9 k關於樂樂改寫，這個也是個很好的教程，首先你可以學習到改寫，並且能改出很好的文章。
2 P! k' m& Y! ?, s* V  P& n4 }1 V其次這個不單單是改寫的教程，它甚至有很多方面都能延伸，至於延伸不多說，自己去延伸，嘿嘿！

自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
+ N) |: C0 F! W% BBecause of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

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2 X; u6 O' U, n- B2 aBecause of their tiny size, parents should choose a car seat carefully that will cater to the needs of a preemie.

' x: d, d- l" @6 q& u( v學員改寫：
Because of their size which are tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.

這裡是我在教程中提到過，形容詞變定語從句，一定要加點料，
$ P4 F" ]0 |8 w7 d+ j因為是第一次改，所以他沒注意，
你看，我稍微加一個單詞
6 G3 z1 M  P- V' N) B& GBecause of their size which is comparatively tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
就自然了。
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aicheng262 發表於 2013-10-29 23:34
我來給你說說吧！
. v% K1 ^6 ]" {! d5 D/ J1 `首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
% n8 f1 }; v7 h- sDofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教 ...

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: A7 d3 @. T( A3 z* ^: vIf needed, a small, rolled towel can be used to fill in any small spaces between the crotch strap and the baby to provide a snug fit.
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! O& z5 [6 N0 u- t學員改寫：
You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces which is small between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.

同樣問題也是出在形容詞轉定語從句
% ~3 l' H3 Z" U) F他是看完教程第一次改寫，所以這個點還沒有掌握太好
樂樂改專門支持論壇，可以免費給他提供點評服務的
  E) f% @6 ^; Z* O2 g稍微加一點料
You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces that is not so big between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
0 P3 R* W9 E; O0 s/ `就再次變得自然了
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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
; }+ e6 ?/ ]9 V3 B, D' S& uBecause of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

" \  B8 y- ]7 ]  l/ Z; Y; C原文：
$ U& z! b& g: K& RHaving baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the baby's head from rolling around during transport.
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what baby support cushions have is cradle the body while supporting effectively for the baby head can keep your baby's head safe from rolling around during transport in your car.

! j+ H+ M' I3 u+ p. O3 A這裡屬於原文稍微難一點，因為較長
A can keep B from doing C
' v/ G0 z9 ]2 {7 g& qA = Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head
: l: i. U' q4 A: p8 oB = the baby's head
; }3 `: e( \! f$ H# @4 Tdoing C = rolling around during transport

但是學員思路是挺好的，我們繼續按照此思路改寫
" \# W. W5 m' L* qWhat we have is the baby support cushions cradling the body that can keep the baby's head from rolling around by supporting it during transport.
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: o0 _& N, }6 C  `; A這裡的改寫方法都是樂樂改寫中提到的，這樣改出的句子，可讀性可以和原文對照，基本是一致的，但更核心問題是 樂樂改寫方法，保護了文章內最要的東西，也就是很多自己改寫時候忽略掉的。。。
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樂樂  2013.10.30我已經讓樓主免費學習dofast了 如果滿意 他就付費繼續學習lelegai 如果不滿意什麼都不損失，不過希望樓主能在這裡回復一下感受

那不是只用付lelegai呢。。
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a64913444 發表於 2013-10-30 11:44
! _8 I6 k" U. c+ O9 X那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

+ Q7 o6 o0 C- r6 j: ?0 c8 y是這樣的，樂樂老師昨晚說：如果我覺得滿意，那麼需要付1000元購買dofast和lelegai，如果不滿意，則不付錢。因為昨晚有事沒看，今天在單位裡，等我看完後我會把感受寫出來給大家看的。
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樂樂 發表於 2013-10-30 00:20
5 |. `, I4 F6 G. e& `- i7 l原文：
Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the ba ...

哈哈 原來我的錯誤主要是在定語從句上啊 看來要多複習複習定語從句的用法。which that what 巴拉巴拉的。。。這篇文章是我自己改寫的。是看完樂樂的教程後 馬上去實踐操作的。。樂樂覺得我寫的這篇文章 適合拿來後期的補充培訓。估計我犯的錯誤其他人也會犯 所以就壟斷了我的文章啦。。

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