lelegai和dofast

我來給你說說吧！
首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
Dofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教程+翻譯工具，基本上你能翻譯出，甚至是寫出基本上無語法錯誤的句子。
8 `. k' O) C' I2 A- |( ]關於樂樂改寫，這個也是個很好的教程，首先你可以學習到改寫，並且能改出很好的文章。
* _; c. ^! k( _# {+ a5 W其次這個不單單是改寫的教程，它甚至有很多方面都能延伸，至於延伸不多說，自己去延伸，嘿嘿！

自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

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Because of their tiny size, parents should choose a car seat carefully that will cater to the needs of a preemie.
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5 r$ x4 ]$ _6 W% e( DBecause of their size which are tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
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這裡是我在教程中提到過，形容詞變定語從句，一定要加點料，
& W0 }; A$ y0 k" D因為是第一次改，所以他沒注意，
+ U$ m' S& ~& U0 @4 ~% V" D- H你看，我稍微加一個單詞
' k8 ~( t9 P% J# I  NBecause of their size which is comparatively tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
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aicheng262 發表於 2013-10-29 23:34
我來給你說說吧！
: ?* ~9 ^0 Y! D4 T0 ~% z3 Z首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
Dofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教 ...

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0 B. Y- L! I- V% Y) @9 ?7 t! HIf needed, a small, rolled towel can be used to fill in any small spaces between the crotch strap and the baby to provide a snug fit.
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! N# w; I2 k5 ]7 v% B1 zYou can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces which is small between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
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' A$ l6 i7 k' p1 h$ N* E2 M同樣問題也是出在形容詞轉定語從句
/ f. t& L2 V+ V. n他是看完教程第一次改寫，所以這個點還沒有掌握太好
樂樂改專門支持論壇，可以免費給他提供點評服務的
4 T7 w. `. W$ o7 {7 u% f3 l稍微加一點料
You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces that is not so big between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
* S- s4 Z: C1 m5 OBecause of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

原文：
$ I& l6 r/ R! ~* V" z+ G& f9 I+ m  eHaving baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the baby's head from rolling around during transport.
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學員改寫：
what baby support cushions have is cradle the body while supporting effectively for the baby head can keep your baby's head safe from rolling around during transport in your car.
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* G  Y& q! P- h/ J1 YA can keep B from doing C
* S7 |; V" D; |9 ]. `2 c! n. \A = Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head
/ s0 [( M2 t; D$ g5 f9 v$ yB = the baby's head
- V1 I+ [4 j9 u% a7 L& ydoing C = rolling around during transport

9 `1 K0 k% j$ k5 S! [' H8 Q+ M6 E4 F/ g但是學員思路是挺好的，我們繼續按照此思路改寫
What we have is the baby support cushions cradling the body that can keep the baby's head from rolling around by supporting it during transport.

" ?7 K) x2 {, O這裡的改寫方法都是樂樂改寫中提到的，這樣改出的句子，可讀性可以和原文對照，基本是一致的，但更核心問題是 樂樂改寫方法，保護了文章內最要的東西，也就是很多自己改寫時候忽略掉的。。。
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樂樂  2013.10.30我已經讓樓主免費學習dofast了 如果滿意 他就付費繼續學習lelegai 如果不滿意什麼都不損失，不過希望樓主能在這裡回復一下感受

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那不是只用付lelegai呢。。
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a64913444 發表於 2013-10-30 11:44
- u- [2 I3 i+ j* t+ r: }+ r$ t0 w8 P那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

% L% D2 G; v- `% z7 [1 _是這樣的，樂樂老師昨晚說：如果我覺得滿意，那麼需要付1000元購買dofast和lelegai，如果不滿意，則不付錢。因為昨晚有事沒看，今天在單位裡，等我看完後我會把感受寫出來給大家看的。
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樂樂 發表於 2013-10-30 00:20
原文：
* f3 ^' i) }$ X0 r5 y9 RHaving baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the ba ...

哈哈 原來我的錯誤主要是在定語從句上啊 看來要多複習複習定語從句的用法。which that what 巴拉巴拉的。。。這篇文章是我自己改寫的。是看完樂樂的教程後 馬上去實踐操作的。。樂樂覺得我寫的這篇文章 適合拿來後期的補充培訓。估計我犯的錯誤其他人也會犯 所以就壟斷了我的文章啦。。

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