lelegai和dofast

我來給你說說吧！
9 R' H! }* X+ d2 p! ~8 [/ K: i首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
/ H) T5 H  g; q1 ^4 n, |Dofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教程+翻譯工具，基本上你能翻譯出，甚至是寫出基本上無語法錯誤的句子。
' n. `9 {9 l. H2 q' y; u關於樂樂改寫，這個也是個很好的教程，首先你可以學習到改寫，並且能改出很好的文章。
' x; S, v0 ]' @' j. _1 l其次這個不單單是改寫的教程，它甚至有很多方面都能延伸，至於延伸不多說，自己去延伸，嘿嘿！

自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

原文：
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學員改寫：
Because of their size which are tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
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. e, a. f" P! L" L( x1 k  o這裡是我在教程中提到過，形容詞變定語從句，一定要加點料，
因為是第一次改，所以他沒注意，
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2 ?8 ^* W# [7 C3 B1 M" _Because of their size which is comparatively tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
就自然了。
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aicheng262 發表於 2013-10-29 23:34
% g  f, k0 I- |7 \" M: g6 B+ G4 V# V我來給你說說吧！
首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
# P3 U7 U( v( n. U& ?  v( JDofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教 ...

原文：
If needed, a small, rolled towel can be used to fill in any small spaces between the crotch strap and the baby to provide a snug fit.
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% c4 C5 t+ `5 W2 e! ^You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces which is small between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
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同樣問題也是出在形容詞轉定語從句
他是看完教程第一次改寫，所以這個點還沒有掌握太好
樂樂改專門支持論壇，可以免費給他提供點評服務的
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You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces that is not so big between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
/ O. k" X1 T8 Y) t5 P4 [Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

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Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the baby's head from rolling around during transport.
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what baby support cushions have is cradle the body while supporting effectively for the baby head can keep your baby's head safe from rolling around during transport in your car.

8 f5 {' Y3 |5 A2 x1 o" O這裡屬於原文稍微難一點，因為較長
A can keep B from doing C
! F  l7 d6 Y5 p/ kA = Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head
B = the baby's head
doing C = rolling around during transport

# G; [4 c# w8 \# s, K. p4 k. ?) j. z1 p但是學員思路是挺好的，我們繼續按照此思路改寫
3 H& \6 \2 `  }  D, j: ?9 W% NWhat we have is the baby support cushions cradling the body that can keep the baby's head from rolling around by supporting it during transport.
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這裡的改寫方法都是樂樂改寫中提到的，這樣改出的句子，可讀性可以和原文對照，基本是一致的，但更核心問題是 樂樂改寫方法，保護了文章內最要的東西，也就是很多自己改寫時候忽略掉的。。。

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樂樂  2013.10.30我已經讓樓主免費學習dofast了 如果滿意 他就付費繼續學習lelegai 如果不滿意什麼都不損失，不過希望樓主能在這裡回復一下感受

: [* h$ o9 |' y! N& ^- x那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

a64913444 發表於 2013-10-30 11:44
3 a% _6 u( b) `那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

- G$ l7 a3 l5 X% X$ v# j+ B是這樣的，樂樂老師昨晚說：如果我覺得滿意，那麼需要付1000元購買dofast和lelegai，如果不滿意，則不付錢。因為昨晚有事沒看，今天在單位裡，等我看完後我會把感受寫出來給大家看的。
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樂樂 發表於 2013-10-30 00:20
原文：
* [% [3 l" _) k1 Q1 x4 k- _& jHaving baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the ba ...

* @5 h7 V  V3 _' `哈哈 原來我的錯誤主要是在定語從句上啊 看來要多複習複習定語從句的用法。which that what 巴拉巴拉的。。。這篇文章是我自己改寫的。是看完樂樂的教程後 馬上去實踐操作的。。樂樂覺得我寫的這篇文章 適合拿來後期的補充培訓。估計我犯的錯誤其他人也會犯 所以就壟斷了我的文章啦。。
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