自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42 
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原文:
& k& J9 i& ?3 f9 \8 j# b+ g* VBecause of their tiny size, parents should choose a car seat carefully that will cater to the needs of a preemie.
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學員改寫:
8 L0 t# f( N" f& PBecause of their size which are tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.$ P/ y9 K" `: M) [% Q, `: g
q# l# T7 {" I" b" p這裡是我在教程中提到過,形容詞變定語從句,一定要加點料,
& ^# A# ^& P% n$ m因為是第一次改,所以他沒注意,
& r3 z& [ Q# ]; |你看,我稍微加一個單詞: F0 _, I) _6 ~+ a
Because of their size which is comparatively tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
% O x8 h. j, |9 o就自然了。
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