lelegai和dofast

我來給你說說吧！
: t8 W& m) Q2 l. `: C. m. |, n' _首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
; H9 [% ~, P3 I8 R3 w- vDofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教程+翻譯工具，基本上你能翻譯出，甚至是寫出基本上無語法錯誤的句子。
# Q9 K9 D8 g2 d* f6 v1 Q關於樂樂改寫，這個也是個很好的教程，首先你可以學習到改寫，並且能改出很好的文章。
  o; Z! ^& l9 o0 H! U其次這個不單單是改寫的教程，它甚至有很多方面都能延伸，至於延伸不多說，自己去延伸，嘿嘿！

自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
5 P" i) u, n8 A) z/ {. L; {Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

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5 J3 N* l4 r. jBecause of their tiny size, parents should choose a car seat carefully that will cater to the needs of a preemie.

學員改寫：
Because of their size which are tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
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這裡是我在教程中提到過，形容詞變定語從句，一定要加點料，
因為是第一次改，所以他沒注意，
你看，我稍微加一個單詞
, H# i1 W6 U  O% OBecause of their size which is comparatively tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
就自然了。

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aicheng262 發表於 2013-10-29 23:34
: Z" \& J1 V; j6 W我來給你說說吧！
首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
Dofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教 ...

原文：
8 m  }& B: Y; A1 k6 lIf needed, a small, rolled towel can be used to fill in any small spaces between the crotch strap and the baby to provide a snug fit.

學員改寫：
9 w1 R6 X1 M( `4 @$ }7 iYou can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces which is small between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.

同樣問題也是出在形容詞轉定語從句
他是看完教程第一次改寫，所以這個點還沒有掌握太好
( p: y5 w$ i% [; P樂樂改專門支持論壇，可以免費給他提供點評服務的
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You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces that is not so big between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

原文：
Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the baby's head from rolling around during transport.

學員改寫：
what baby support cushions have is cradle the body while supporting effectively for the baby head can keep your baby's head safe from rolling around during transport in your car.

這裡屬於原文稍微難一點，因為較長
- N9 y/ \2 n+ l! I' oA can keep B from doing C
A = Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head
B = the baby's head
8 `1 j. B7 E, N, X7 Kdoing C = rolling around during transport
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但是學員思路是挺好的，我們繼續按照此思路改寫
. B% x' l/ s1 VWhat we have is the baby support cushions cradling the body that can keep the baby's head from rolling around by supporting it during transport.
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/ x, E6 Z7 \1 O! }這裡的改寫方法都是樂樂改寫中提到的，這樣改出的句子，可讀性可以和原文對照，基本是一致的，但更核心問題是 樂樂改寫方法，保護了文章內最要的東西，也就是很多自己改寫時候忽略掉的。。。
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樂樂  2013.10.30我已經讓樓主免費學習dofast了 如果滿意 他就付費繼續學習lelegai 如果不滿意什麼都不損失，不過希望樓主能在這裡回復一下感受

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- D. N, M5 z+ l, |8 a* j那不是只用付lelegai呢。。
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a64913444 發表於 2013-10-30 11:44
- X# X  o4 Z: ]4 d5 f那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

% P. e; f. S" g* d. l& T是這樣的，樂樂老師昨晚說：如果我覺得滿意，那麼需要付1000元購買dofast和lelegai，如果不滿意，則不付錢。因為昨晚有事沒看，今天在單位裡，等我看完後我會把感受寫出來給大家看的。
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樂樂 發表於 2013-10-30 00:20
7 U( d8 F% q; U( H: {3 K原文：
Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the ba ...

哈哈 原來我的錯誤主要是在定語從句上啊 看來要多複習複習定語從句的用法。which that what 巴拉巴拉的。。。這篇文章是我自己改寫的。是看完樂樂的教程後 馬上去實踐操作的。。樂樂覺得我寫的這篇文章 適合拿來後期的補充培訓。估計我犯的錯誤其他人也會犯 所以就壟斷了我的文章啦。。
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