lelegai和dofast

我來給你說說吧！
: m# x8 W) X1 Y2 d* D首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
  r0 t1 Q% s& ^: MDofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教程+翻譯工具，基本上你能翻譯出，甚至是寫出基本上無語法錯誤的句子。
關於樂樂改寫，這個也是個很好的教程，首先你可以學習到改寫，並且能改出很好的文章。
其次這個不單單是改寫的教程，它甚至有很多方面都能延伸，至於延伸不多說，自己去延伸，嘿嘿！
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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
% v* ^2 a7 u$ h; A" {. i+ BBecause of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

原文：
8 N0 A# p, V# K9 M& u' yBecause of their tiny size, parents should choose a car seat carefully that will cater to the needs of a preemie.
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學員改寫：
* {. e0 S! T: D  c" h; b* h- t& VBecause of their size which are tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.

這裡是我在教程中提到過，形容詞變定語從句，一定要加點料，
因為是第一次改，所以他沒注意，
' k4 R+ `. h% |# r4 ^8 q$ w4 `你看，我稍微加一個單詞
Because of their size which is comparatively tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
  l/ ^) h2 q9 y$ _% `! X8 h就自然了。

aicheng262 發表於 2013-10-29 23:34
, s, y" F; I' P! O' |我來給你說說吧！
8 j- p& Y% G6 m/ }3 z( ^首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
3 c( ]' s- Y' i6 ]4 s, J' EDofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教 ...

" [/ j3 H5 H* P6 s原文：
, i$ S9 _" f# Q  q* w7 [, T6 N$ q) B- dIf needed, a small, rolled towel can be used to fill in any small spaces between the crotch strap and the baby to provide a snug fit.
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! t+ e- ]8 E. V  eYou can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces which is small between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.

同樣問題也是出在形容詞轉定語從句
" i1 K- `6 e; u. |7 O& z他是看完教程第一次改寫，所以這個點還沒有掌握太好
2 q6 X  C# o+ w  Q: [/ `. C樂樂改專門支持論壇，可以免費給他提供點評服務的
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+ b8 }* u4 T7 Y! z+ s9 I1 y5 S: q7 zYou can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces that is not so big between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
就再次變得自然了

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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

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Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the baby's head from rolling around during transport.

學員改寫：
2 d& C+ `' m+ M& u+ h  t: d- p/ Hwhat baby support cushions have is cradle the body while supporting effectively for the baby head can keep your baby's head safe from rolling around during transport in your car.

5 X7 M( s5 {; w# [$ a& U: J這裡屬於原文稍微難一點，因為較長
A can keep B from doing C
A = Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head
B = the baby's head
! W; u% r' `0 G7 S9 tdoing C = rolling around during transport

但是學員思路是挺好的，我們繼續按照此思路改寫
* E1 q1 [3 `5 A# ?7 SWhat we have is the baby support cushions cradling the body that can keep the baby's head from rolling around by supporting it during transport.

- i( H* J- K* {+ T; k這裡的改寫方法都是樂樂改寫中提到的，這樣改出的句子，可讀性可以和原文對照，基本是一致的，但更核心問題是 樂樂改寫方法，保護了文章內最要的東西，也就是很多自己改寫時候忽略掉的。。。

樂樂  2013.10.30我已經讓樓主免費學習dofast了 如果滿意 他就付費繼續學習lelegai 如果不滿意什麼都不損失，不過希望樓主能在這裡回復一下感受

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, ~$ c+ V+ F3 l1 m: K( N. e那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

a64913444 發表於 2013-10-30 11:44
那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

) Z2 b. ]% A: m  S. o是這樣的，樂樂老師昨晚說：如果我覺得滿意，那麼需要付1000元購買dofast和lelegai，如果不滿意，則不付錢。因為昨晚有事沒看，今天在單位裡，等我看完後我會把感受寫出來給大家看的。

樂樂 發表於 2013-10-30 00:20
原文：
. g; H4 |/ y/ m0 dHaving baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the ba ...

2 ^" }" G1 o4 M3 T) s$ ?' S- M哈哈 原來我的錯誤主要是在定語從句上啊 看來要多複習複習定語從句的用法。which that what 巴拉巴拉的。。。這篇文章是我自己改寫的。是看完樂樂的教程後 馬上去實踐操作的。。樂樂覺得我寫的這篇文章 適合拿來後期的補充培訓。估計我犯的錯誤其他人也會犯 所以就壟斷了我的文章啦。。
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