lelegai和dofast

我來給你說說吧！
首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
Dofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教程+翻譯工具，基本上你能翻譯出，甚至是寫出基本上無語法錯誤的句子。
關於樂樂改寫，這個也是個很好的教程，首先你可以學習到改寫，並且能改出很好的文章。
其次這個不單單是改寫的教程，它甚至有很多方面都能延伸，至於延伸不多說，自己去延伸，嘿嘿！
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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
$ `" i0 F8 ~0 }4 o  F$ rBecause of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

原文：
& M% G! g! n' h: \' l6 D9 UBecause of their tiny size, parents should choose a car seat carefully that will cater to the needs of a preemie.

學員改寫：
Because of their size which are tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
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這裡是我在教程中提到過，形容詞變定語從句，一定要加點料，
因為是第一次改，所以他沒注意，
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Because of their size which is comparatively tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
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aicheng262 發表於 2013-10-29 23:34
" r2 B: l1 `1 L我來給你說說吧！
! Q0 O6 q1 r! q+ g  \1 R首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
8 v3 `& [  i8 s% D. ]8 aDofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教 ...

原文：
7 y1 u! `8 @# ^! _  l7 B- Q( \, VIf needed, a small, rolled towel can be used to fill in any small spaces between the crotch strap and the baby to provide a snug fit.

: {) `. k8 {. X/ }, ]! R學員改寫：
You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces which is small between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.

同樣問題也是出在形容詞轉定語從句
$ I- I& E0 q9 ]/ Z/ g% V3 p他是看完教程第一次改寫，所以這個點還沒有掌握太好
4 C, }3 N$ V2 t+ I* p樂樂改專門支持論壇，可以免費給他提供點評服務的
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You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces that is not so big between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
就再次變得自然了
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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

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6 Y4 @9 N: e, n9 s' z  d6 {( dHaving baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the baby's head from rolling around during transport.

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; S1 y$ ~: p% S5 x, T) c8 wwhat baby support cushions have is cradle the body while supporting effectively for the baby head can keep your baby's head safe from rolling around during transport in your car.
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A = Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head
B = the baby's head
. x0 h2 @# L0 ^doing C = rolling around during transport
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, ^& Y6 c; g0 g9 Z7 a1 J6 t但是學員思路是挺好的，我們繼續按照此思路改寫
What we have is the baby support cushions cradling the body that can keep the baby's head from rolling around by supporting it during transport.

這裡的改寫方法都是樂樂改寫中提到的，這樣改出的句子，可讀性可以和原文對照，基本是一致的，但更核心問題是 樂樂改寫方法，保護了文章內最要的東西，也就是很多自己改寫時候忽略掉的。。。
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樂樂  2013.10.30我已經讓樓主免費學習dofast了 如果滿意 他就付費繼續學習lelegai 如果不滿意什麼都不損失，不過希望樓主能在這裡回復一下感受

. l0 m; W: }' j2 x那不是只用付lelegai呢。。
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a64913444 發表於 2013-10-30 11:44
6 q# e* b& s: @/ S) W那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

. I0 U8 K% A0 A* y+ B是這樣的，樂樂老師昨晚說：如果我覺得滿意，那麼需要付1000元購買dofast和lelegai，如果不滿意，則不付錢。因為昨晚有事沒看，今天在單位裡，等我看完後我會把感受寫出來給大家看的。

樂樂 發表於 2013-10-30 00:20
5 m- a! w2 `+ C# x. w原文：
6 i" V+ c* {* E) gHaving baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the ba ...

8 T3 r: R! h- e9 E哈哈 原來我的錯誤主要是在定語從句上啊 看來要多複習複習定語從句的用法。which that what 巴拉巴拉的。。。這篇文章是我自己改寫的。是看完樂樂的教程後 馬上去實踐操作的。。樂樂覺得我寫的這篇文章 適合拿來後期的補充培訓。估計我犯的錯誤其他人也會犯 所以就壟斷了我的文章啦。。
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