lelegai和dofast

我來給你說說吧！
* h3 L. K* U$ h2 a首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
Dofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教程+翻譯工具，基本上你能翻譯出，甚至是寫出基本上無語法錯誤的句子。
5 T/ C  a. n: a; ^關於樂樂改寫，這個也是個很好的教程，首先你可以學習到改寫，並且能改出很好的文章。
" P$ G. L' X' F4 |7 ~其次這個不單單是改寫的教程，它甚至有很多方面都能延伸，至於延伸不多說，自己去延伸，嘿嘿！

自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

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Because of their tiny size, parents should choose a car seat carefully that will cater to the needs of a preemie.
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Because of their size which are tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.

8 _9 e/ F+ W. ]4 u9 [這裡是我在教程中提到過，形容詞變定語從句，一定要加點料，
因為是第一次改，所以他沒注意，
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Because of their size which is comparatively tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
就自然了。
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aicheng262 發表於 2013-10-29 23:34
- v3 g( s1 h+ W8 ^0 h我來給你說說吧！
' [7 \- I) v% H7 S0 n7 H9 F4 r首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
Dofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教 ...

原文：
1 Z9 r, b  I% I( KIf needed, a small, rolled towel can be used to fill in any small spaces between the crotch strap and the baby to provide a snug fit.
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: W- `( z$ }" P" HYou can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces which is small between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.

同樣問題也是出在形容詞轉定語從句
, L4 F: V% _, L. D" `; b+ F$ S他是看完教程第一次改寫，所以這個點還沒有掌握太好
# N+ z. d! }  n# C0 t) `* B樂樂改專門支持論壇，可以免費給他提供點評服務的
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You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces that is not so big between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
就再次變得自然了

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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
3 Q! c& o& ?( J2 `" m- @Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

原文：
) {6 Z- `% ?* S5 j* hHaving baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the baby's head from rolling around during transport.
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- g0 D: t! R& s5 y2 Bwhat baby support cushions have is cradle the body while supporting effectively for the baby head can keep your baby's head safe from rolling around during transport in your car.

. {1 g6 ~5 Z8 L/ H7 |- ~3 _4 d4 x這裡屬於原文稍微難一點，因為較長
* J6 T. P5 J, ^/ {! \2 hA can keep B from doing C
, ^  p9 F/ L1 q; Y( _A = Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head
$ B5 e8 q3 h$ q8 s: |B = the baby's head
4 z1 }# L! c  Ldoing C = rolling around during transport
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3 v( T& K4 A) `* S9 J* G1 ?但是學員思路是挺好的，我們繼續按照此思路改寫
What we have is the baby support cushions cradling the body that can keep the baby's head from rolling around by supporting it during transport.
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. Q" D& ]5 B: q; Z( D1 q$ Q這裡的改寫方法都是樂樂改寫中提到的，這樣改出的句子，可讀性可以和原文對照，基本是一致的，但更核心問題是 樂樂改寫方法，保護了文章內最要的東西，也就是很多自己改寫時候忽略掉的。。。

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樂樂  2013.10.30我已經讓樓主免費學習dofast了 如果滿意 他就付費繼續學習lelegai 如果不滿意什麼都不損失，不過希望樓主能在這裡回復一下感受

; |) K+ b, e  a那不是只用付lelegai呢。。
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a64913444 發表於 2013-10-30 11:44
8 ]- U0 ~% |+ d那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

是這樣的，樂樂老師昨晚說：如果我覺得滿意，那麼需要付1000元購買dofast和lelegai，如果不滿意，則不付錢。因為昨晚有事沒看，今天在單位裡，等我看完後我會把感受寫出來給大家看的。
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樂樂 發表於 2013-10-30 00:20
原文：
3 b% `5 l+ V# G& {. R* RHaving baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the ba ...

  r# S- z: b( P/ z, }  m4 ^  e哈哈 原來我的錯誤主要是在定語從句上啊 看來要多複習複習定語從句的用法。which that what 巴拉巴拉的。。。這篇文章是我自己改寫的。是看完樂樂的教程後 馬上去實踐操作的。。樂樂覺得我寫的這篇文章 適合拿來後期的補充培訓。估計我犯的錯誤其他人也會犯 所以就壟斷了我的文章啦。。
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