lelegai和dofast

我來給你說說吧！
# s3 r* R4 B+ x, s首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
% ^$ p# ~; F) S" b3 H: p: HDofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教程+翻譯工具，基本上你能翻譯出，甚至是寫出基本上無語法錯誤的句子。
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其次這個不單單是改寫的教程，它甚至有很多方面都能延伸，至於延伸不多說，自己去延伸，嘿嘿！
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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

原文：
5 ~4 ]0 ?% s3 N8 p' y8 ~Because of their tiny size, parents should choose a car seat carefully that will cater to the needs of a preemie.

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Because of their size which are tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
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這裡是我在教程中提到過，形容詞變定語從句，一定要加點料，
+ S( |; @. S+ Z因為是第一次改，所以他沒注意，
你看，我稍微加一個單詞
Because of their size which is comparatively tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
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aicheng262 發表於 2013-10-29 23:34
& d* H$ m1 q3 l8 k我來給你說說吧！
' d) l0 M  E" w' C2 c' C: F$ l0 D首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
. r- w/ g+ l9 pDofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教 ...

# d" K& w: F" d原文：
5 p; V2 {/ _2 a0 z2 L8 @If needed, a small, rolled towel can be used to fill in any small spaces between the crotch strap and the baby to provide a snug fit.
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學員改寫：
You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces which is small between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.

! y* h, S2 o2 a& O0 L同樣問題也是出在形容詞轉定語從句
. E' |, Y3 @! [1 A8 P0 g2 `他是看完教程第一次改寫，所以這個點還沒有掌握太好
( z' \# |: U6 y4 a% _& E樂樂改專門支持論壇，可以免費給他提供點評服務的
稍微加一點料
You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces that is not so big between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

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Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the baby's head from rolling around during transport.
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學員改寫：
/ _+ ]7 A* J) m4 O5 fwhat baby support cushions have is cradle the body while supporting effectively for the baby head can keep your baby's head safe from rolling around during transport in your car.
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' f) _) f# ~- H' V& K+ A' \這裡屬於原文稍微難一點，因為較長
7 ^; v& G& R. I! F7 x; F0 |  YA can keep B from doing C
A = Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head
B = the baby's head
3 k2 w. X! @$ f9 bdoing C = rolling around during transport

% b9 \6 @; t2 m( h( o但是學員思路是挺好的，我們繼續按照此思路改寫
1 G" x' f* A' t# {* T$ YWhat we have is the baby support cushions cradling the body that can keep the baby's head from rolling around by supporting it during transport.

4 V7 O! b+ |' D: F/ J& d這裡的改寫方法都是樂樂改寫中提到的，這樣改出的句子，可讀性可以和原文對照，基本是一致的，但更核心問題是 樂樂改寫方法，保護了文章內最要的東西，也就是很多自己改寫時候忽略掉的。。。
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樂樂  2013.10.30我已經讓樓主免費學習dofast了 如果滿意 他就付費繼續學習lelegai 如果不滿意什麼都不損失，不過希望樓主能在這裡回復一下感受

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那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

a64913444 發表於 2013-10-30 11:44
那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

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樂樂 發表於 2013-10-30 00:20
; z% F1 _2 |" Y1 f$ }  O原文：
0 y, K7 c) c5 u/ W2 ?' k9 kHaving baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the ba ...

哈哈 原來我的錯誤主要是在定語從句上啊 看來要多複習複習定語從句的用法。which that what 巴拉巴拉的。。。這篇文章是我自己改寫的。是看完樂樂的教程後 馬上去實踐操作的。。樂樂覺得我寫的這篇文章 適合拿來後期的補充培訓。估計我犯的錯誤其他人也會犯 所以就壟斷了我的文章啦。。
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