lelegai和dofast

我來給你說說吧！
首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
Dofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教程+翻譯工具，基本上你能翻譯出，甚至是寫出基本上無語法錯誤的句子。
關於樂樂改寫，這個也是個很好的教程，首先你可以學習到改寫，並且能改出很好的文章。
9 r6 L7 X" |9 @4 T% F其次這個不單單是改寫的教程，它甚至有很多方面都能延伸，至於延伸不多說，自己去延伸，嘿嘿！

自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

原文：
$ F) q8 D: h( pBecause of their tiny size, parents should choose a car seat carefully that will cater to the needs of a preemie.

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0 g. ?6 h- Z0 z" YBecause of their size which are tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
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這裡是我在教程中提到過，形容詞變定語從句，一定要加點料，
4 C. k. {) [5 T/ ^因為是第一次改，所以他沒注意，
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1 ^9 T. w, v$ VBecause of their size which is comparatively tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
就自然了。

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aicheng262 發表於 2013-10-29 23:34
' e  N, V% d6 Z/ R; v# v我來給你說說吧！
, c' a' C; b+ V0 E首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
1 R) D% K5 H' T- I/ V3 \. UDofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教 ...

% R4 \9 g4 l% Z+ [0 @4 J2 K8 V原文：
( J, E" D  M) I5 g; OIf needed, a small, rolled towel can be used to fill in any small spaces between the crotch strap and the baby to provide a snug fit.

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You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces which is small between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.

同樣問題也是出在形容詞轉定語從句
他是看完教程第一次改寫，所以這個點還沒有掌握太好
樂樂改專門支持論壇，可以免費給他提供點評服務的
9 G  s4 g$ }+ i稍微加一點料
You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces that is not so big between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
就再次變得自然了

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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

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Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the baby's head from rolling around during transport.
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what baby support cushions have is cradle the body while supporting effectively for the baby head can keep your baby's head safe from rolling around during transport in your car.
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  L- w" [4 L0 T6 _& N8 d0 Z( p! ?9 H這裡屬於原文稍微難一點，因為較長
! _' z4 Q9 i& o3 _) B: V1 EA can keep B from doing C
, h3 l5 _5 U, t9 ]" UA = Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head
B = the baby's head
: `% s" b, ~: v7 j* h; d; Rdoing C = rolling around during transport
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* H/ N8 R& J4 o+ {  _# f/ v4 R但是學員思路是挺好的，我們繼續按照此思路改寫
What we have is the baby support cushions cradling the body that can keep the baby's head from rolling around by supporting it during transport.
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  F8 k' b! W- j2 ~) _. e1 |這裡的改寫方法都是樂樂改寫中提到的，這樣改出的句子，可讀性可以和原文對照，基本是一致的，但更核心問題是 樂樂改寫方法，保護了文章內最要的東西，也就是很多自己改寫時候忽略掉的。。。
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樂樂  2013.10.30我已經讓樓主免費學習dofast了 如果滿意 他就付費繼續學習lelegai 如果不滿意什麼都不損失，不過希望樓主能在這裡回復一下感受

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7 m, K3 a$ H: W# `$ }那不是只用付lelegai呢。。
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a64913444 發表於 2013-10-30 11:44
% R, S. @* c! n2 y$ M9 O. w那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

, ]) A7 r9 F8 U2 G8 W是這樣的，樂樂老師昨晚說：如果我覺得滿意，那麼需要付1000元購買dofast和lelegai，如果不滿意，則不付錢。因為昨晚有事沒看，今天在單位裡，等我看完後我會把感受寫出來給大家看的。

樂樂 發表於 2013-10-30 00:20
: ~" m# E, m7 |$ ~: [原文：
Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the ba ...

哈哈 原來我的錯誤主要是在定語從句上啊 看來要多複習複習定語從句的用法。which that what 巴拉巴拉的。。。這篇文章是我自己改寫的。是看完樂樂的教程後 馬上去實踐操作的。。樂樂覺得我寫的這篇文章 適合拿來後期的補充培訓。估計我犯的錯誤其他人也會犯 所以就壟斷了我的文章啦。。

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