自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42 ! R( g; A6 H" D. n0 p) `0 C
Because of their size which are tiny, in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...
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what baby support cushions have is cradle the body while supporting effectively for the baby head can keep your baby's head safe from rolling around during transport in your car.4 n _- U" S; R# l+ t( Q
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doing C = rolling around during transport
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但是學員思路是挺好的,我們繼續按照此思路改寫* N8 w+ p4 q7 {# Z
What we have is the baby support cushions cradling the body that can keep the baby's head from rolling around by supporting it during transport.
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這裡的改寫方法都是樂樂改寫中提到的,這樣改出的句子,可讀性可以和原文對照,基本是一致的,但更核心問題是 樂樂改寫方法,保護了文章內最要的東西,也就是很多自己改寫時候忽略掉的。。。; _' P) F, ~: e/ r2 s/ v( X
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