lelegai和dofast

我來給你說說吧！
首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
: c$ m2 A1 h$ d1 j" s; @0 iDofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教程+翻譯工具，基本上你能翻譯出，甚至是寫出基本上無語法錯誤的句子。
2 j8 J& ~$ X& K* ?+ J關於樂樂改寫，這個也是個很好的教程，首先你可以學習到改寫，並且能改出很好的文章。
其次這個不單單是改寫的教程，它甚至有很多方面都能延伸，至於延伸不多說，自己去延伸，嘿嘿！

自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

原文：
Because of their tiny size, parents should choose a car seat carefully that will cater to the needs of a preemie.

學員改寫：
Because of their size which are tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
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這裡是我在教程中提到過，形容詞變定語從句，一定要加點料，
! ]1 R6 h2 y% q1 I% S因為是第一次改，所以他沒注意，
# i4 o& F7 ?6 P你看，我稍微加一個單詞
. P) m7 W- S2 Y! H1 ~Because of their size which is comparatively tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
就自然了。

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aicheng262 發表於 2013-10-29 23:34
6 M' Y9 }8 q0 R. K, \1 z我來給你說說吧！
首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
+ ]$ Y9 k9 S/ u3 c1 g) mDofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教 ...

  u8 Z" S- i. ^" V原文：
If needed, a small, rolled towel can be used to fill in any small spaces between the crotch strap and the baby to provide a snug fit.

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3 j) z  n7 ?5 G$ {0 f9 k* d, ]6 rYou can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces which is small between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.

同樣問題也是出在形容詞轉定語從句
" O$ Q% M3 u! l2 c' U6 c他是看完教程第一次改寫，所以這個點還沒有掌握太好
# C  R. F5 H2 C, ~! }樂樂改專門支持論壇，可以免費給他提供點評服務的
稍微加一點料
5 J, z! X* g7 T2 |You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces that is not so big between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
5 Y% }' {4 m# hBecause of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

% [. w0 {( S! B4 _" P7 K, \6 r原文：
Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the baby's head from rolling around during transport.
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8 |$ a+ g5 c2 ^4 U8 Zwhat baby support cushions have is cradle the body while supporting effectively for the baby head can keep your baby's head safe from rolling around during transport in your car.
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這裡屬於原文稍微難一點，因為較長
A can keep B from doing C
7 \5 A; Q+ e; ?# }/ K' {# Y, l; u$ iA = Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head
4 `; c/ D9 z3 k; A5 f! y& x; y5 y/ RB = the baby's head
doing C = rolling around during transport
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3 Z; L' ^" y* ^0 M5 `但是學員思路是挺好的，我們繼續按照此思路改寫
+ C" X% O# z. pWhat we have is the baby support cushions cradling the body that can keep the baby's head from rolling around by supporting it during transport.
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這裡的改寫方法都是樂樂改寫中提到的，這樣改出的句子，可讀性可以和原文對照，基本是一致的，但更核心問題是 樂樂改寫方法，保護了文章內最要的東西，也就是很多自己改寫時候忽略掉的。。。
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樂樂  2013.10.30我已經讓樓主免費學習dofast了 如果滿意 他就付費繼續學習lelegai 如果不滿意什麼都不損失，不過希望樓主能在這裡回復一下感受

! G+ m, s% U; k那不是只用付lelegai呢。。
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a64913444 發表於 2013-10-30 11:44
% J; u  I' a9 v; f1 o那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

( o" h- \7 Y% o/ F, W0 ], s是這樣的，樂樂老師昨晚說：如果我覺得滿意，那麼需要付1000元購買dofast和lelegai，如果不滿意，則不付錢。因為昨晚有事沒看，今天在單位裡，等我看完後我會把感受寫出來給大家看的。

樂樂 發表於 2013-10-30 00:20
原文：
Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the ba ...

. ^( c  M) {/ v8 o% C) |+ k哈哈 原來我的錯誤主要是在定語從句上啊 看來要多複習複習定語從句的用法。which that what 巴拉巴拉的。。。這篇文章是我自己改寫的。是看完樂樂的教程後 馬上去實踐操作的。。樂樂覺得我寫的這篇文章 適合拿來後期的補充培訓。估計我犯的錯誤其他人也會犯 所以就壟斷了我的文章啦。。

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