lelegai和dofast

我來給你說說吧！
" m3 T. J  A0 E/ p首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
Dofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教程+翻譯工具，基本上你能翻譯出，甚至是寫出基本上無語法錯誤的句子。
3 f* y8 W- l2 S; L關於樂樂改寫，這個也是個很好的教程，首先你可以學習到改寫，並且能改出很好的文章。
其次這個不單單是改寫的教程，它甚至有很多方面都能延伸，至於延伸不多說，自己去延伸，嘿嘿！

自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

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Because of their tiny size, parents should choose a car seat carefully that will cater to the needs of a preemie.
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Because of their size which are tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.

5 G, f8 c/ U6 B3 b+ y+ m1 ~這裡是我在教程中提到過，形容詞變定語從句，一定要加點料，
8 W3 \+ v6 f# \# ~% U& J6 s1 K因為是第一次改，所以他沒注意，
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: h5 d3 r7 }- b' w' e! yBecause of their size which is comparatively tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
就自然了。

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aicheng262 發表於 2013-10-29 23:34
- x" f: u- F: J4 k4 D2 ^我來給你說說吧！
首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
Dofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教 ...

原文：
If needed, a small, rolled towel can be used to fill in any small spaces between the crotch strap and the baby to provide a snug fit.
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You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces which is small between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.

同樣問題也是出在形容詞轉定語從句
( z4 R& B5 U8 }8 X1 l他是看完教程第一次改寫，所以這個點還沒有掌握太好
. p* r6 @" c. K. y" x+ |9 y樂樂改專門支持論壇，可以免費給他提供點評服務的
稍微加一點料
2 `- t0 }* r$ C8 `+ K) ~+ @You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces that is not so big between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
7 o7 o1 x1 T; t4 M; T2 y& ?2 {Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

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: m: \- _7 l! e  Z; THaving baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the baby's head from rolling around during transport.
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學員改寫：
& P& k, d4 a4 L5 Qwhat baby support cushions have is cradle the body while supporting effectively for the baby head can keep your baby's head safe from rolling around during transport in your car.
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這裡屬於原文稍微難一點，因為較長
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A = Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head
B = the baby's head
doing C = rolling around during transport

. D) F# {: a& X- v- t) X但是學員思路是挺好的，我們繼續按照此思路改寫
1 C8 z3 B2 _6 c0 U* j! M' e" }4 bWhat we have is the baby support cushions cradling the body that can keep the baby's head from rolling around by supporting it during transport.

0 t' h6 M5 H* W6 @; I$ F+ P這裡的改寫方法都是樂樂改寫中提到的，這樣改出的句子，可讀性可以和原文對照，基本是一致的，但更核心問題是 樂樂改寫方法，保護了文章內最要的東西，也就是很多自己改寫時候忽略掉的。。。
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樂樂  2013.10.30我已經讓樓主免費學習dofast了 如果滿意 他就付費繼續學習lelegai 如果不滿意什麼都不損失，不過希望樓主能在這裡回復一下感受

( s0 M9 G3 ?# h. F6 y那不是只用付lelegai呢。。
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a64913444 發表於 2013-10-30 11:44
那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

9 G+ A  z% V& d- {4 O3 I( X是這樣的，樂樂老師昨晚說：如果我覺得滿意，那麼需要付1000元購買dofast和lelegai，如果不滿意，則不付錢。因為昨晚有事沒看，今天在單位裡，等我看完後我會把感受寫出來給大家看的。

樂樂 發表於 2013-10-30 00:20
原文：
9 x9 q5 L. w1 h% g" q7 P  E6 oHaving baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the ba ...

6 k- m# w. v6 ^' N, r+ D5 Y+ O哈哈 原來我的錯誤主要是在定語從句上啊 看來要多複習複習定語從句的用法。which that what 巴拉巴拉的。。。這篇文章是我自己改寫的。是看完樂樂的教程後 馬上去實踐操作的。。樂樂覺得我寫的這篇文章 適合拿來後期的補充培訓。估計我犯的錯誤其他人也會犯 所以就壟斷了我的文章啦。。
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