lelegai和dofast

我來給你說說吧！
首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
2 J. l8 w* T7 v' ~0 P% BDofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教程+翻譯工具，基本上你能翻譯出，甚至是寫出基本上無語法錯誤的句子。
9 X- F; M) f" K" @4 z關於樂樂改寫，這個也是個很好的教程，首先你可以學習到改寫，並且能改出很好的文章。
其次這個不單單是改寫的教程，它甚至有很多方面都能延伸，至於延伸不多說，自己去延伸，嘿嘿！
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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

# Y/ d! L/ m" ^  s6 P% L" [8 U1 {原文：
" U- Z2 i0 k9 n* H, [2 V% z8 u  @0 z) {) aBecause of their tiny size, parents should choose a car seat carefully that will cater to the needs of a preemie.
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學員改寫：
Because of their size which are tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
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- U* S4 e+ p$ Y0 o這裡是我在教程中提到過，形容詞變定語從句，一定要加點料，
% u4 k( I* A# I! ^! O- h3 k5 x因為是第一次改，所以他沒注意，
你看，我稍微加一個單詞
; Q/ C& W8 T4 ~  A" F  [Because of their size which is comparatively tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
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aicheng262 發表於 2013-10-29 23:34
我來給你說說吧！
; U% W5 r& c: \首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
1 X+ V+ ~  H+ y- T( }) kDofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教 ...

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If needed, a small, rolled towel can be used to fill in any small spaces between the crotch strap and the baby to provide a snug fit.

學員改寫：
8 _) ?/ P# S8 `. ^You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces which is small between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.

# C4 A" [7 Y. {0 }+ o同樣問題也是出在形容詞轉定語從句
他是看完教程第一次改寫，所以這個點還沒有掌握太好
2 L+ i7 ?7 {6 Y樂樂改專門支持論壇，可以免費給他提供點評服務的
稍微加一點料
You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces that is not so big between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
) m1 h$ [$ P, fBecause of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

原文：
+ E/ ?8 m/ e& d/ R* s$ f1 ~. BHaving baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the baby's head from rolling around during transport.
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學員改寫：
what baby support cushions have is cradle the body while supporting effectively for the baby head can keep your baby's head safe from rolling around during transport in your car.
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# x3 q+ h" q8 U( E9 D: e& o5 D/ }這裡屬於原文稍微難一點，因為較長
A can keep B from doing C
A = Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head
B = the baby's head
* |9 z' h, L% p: V" K" Tdoing C = rolling around during transport

' A! m1 D6 F) C但是學員思路是挺好的，我們繼續按照此思路改寫
$ b5 ~  S: @. b0 o( u! s5 RWhat we have is the baby support cushions cradling the body that can keep the baby's head from rolling around by supporting it during transport.

這裡的改寫方法都是樂樂改寫中提到的，這樣改出的句子，可讀性可以和原文對照，基本是一致的，但更核心問題是 樂樂改寫方法，保護了文章內最要的東西，也就是很多自己改寫時候忽略掉的。。。
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樂樂  2013.10.30我已經讓樓主免費學習dofast了 如果滿意 他就付費繼續學習lelegai 如果不滿意什麼都不損失，不過希望樓主能在這裡回復一下感受

( \. E# a4 p% F) w5 \那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

a64913444 發表於 2013-10-30 11:44
$ @  ~0 \5 c0 Y' R7 y* i0 E+ @那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

( W5 e4 ]" @0 e7 H* [是這樣的，樂樂老師昨晚說：如果我覺得滿意，那麼需要付1000元購買dofast和lelegai，如果不滿意，則不付錢。因為昨晚有事沒看，今天在單位裡，等我看完後我會把感受寫出來給大家看的。

樂樂 發表於 2013-10-30 00:20
# f; G# I! q8 D" K原文：
$ H; z1 ]) R% T( q) @9 @Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the ba ...

哈哈 原來我的錯誤主要是在定語從句上啊 看來要多複習複習定語從句的用法。which that what 巴拉巴拉的。。。這篇文章是我自己改寫的。是看完樂樂的教程後 馬上去實踐操作的。。樂樂覺得我寫的這篇文章 適合拿來後期的補充培訓。估計我犯的錯誤其他人也會犯 所以就壟斷了我的文章啦。。

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