lelegai和dofast

我來給你說說吧！
首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
Dofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教程+翻譯工具，基本上你能翻譯出，甚至是寫出基本上無語法錯誤的句子。
7 m  D* F7 p* k關於樂樂改寫，這個也是個很好的教程，首先你可以學習到改寫，並且能改出很好的文章。
其次這個不單單是改寫的教程，它甚至有很多方面都能延伸，至於延伸不多說，自己去延伸，嘿嘿！

自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

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( y; l6 `' w$ V& R" |& EBecause of their tiny size, parents should choose a car seat carefully that will cater to the needs of a preemie.

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9 v+ _/ t! {$ l. v+ T& B# mBecause of their size which are tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.

" G  Y( l+ `7 o$ U/ N  P$ v這裡是我在教程中提到過，形容詞變定語從句，一定要加點料，
3 ^7 r: V4 f) j- w0 j因為是第一次改，所以他沒注意，
你看，我稍微加一個單詞
Because of their size which is comparatively tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
就自然了。
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aicheng262 發表於 2013-10-29 23:34
3 m/ {+ ?5 I$ N. a我來給你說說吧！
首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
' f6 b* e8 A- N  h* m+ q4 i5 }- WDofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教 ...

原文：
If needed, a small, rolled towel can be used to fill in any small spaces between the crotch strap and the baby to provide a snug fit.

學員改寫：
You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces which is small between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
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5 r- m- j% G/ H& S/ M  {, S& C/ o同樣問題也是出在形容詞轉定語從句
他是看完教程第一次改寫，所以這個點還沒有掌握太好
樂樂改專門支持論壇，可以免費給他提供點評服務的
5 }6 v( m6 i' j0 ?4 G3 s" i" V稍微加一點料
You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces that is not so big between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
9 @0 e& ]) \! ^) o& ?5 l就再次變得自然了

自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

原文：
; K# }) g. \; G- B. BHaving baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the baby's head from rolling around during transport.

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what baby support cushions have is cradle the body while supporting effectively for the baby head can keep your baby's head safe from rolling around during transport in your car.
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3 y; k. C8 E0 }& B" h這裡屬於原文稍微難一點，因為較長
A can keep B from doing C
A = Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head
B = the baby's head
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4 F$ O* F% J4 I6 M, z, `8 s但是學員思路是挺好的，我們繼續按照此思路改寫
8 l# k6 @" r3 M3 R- x( H0 e- dWhat we have is the baby support cushions cradling the body that can keep the baby's head from rolling around by supporting it during transport.

" O$ t& Z% m( K/ H這裡的改寫方法都是樂樂改寫中提到的，這樣改出的句子，可讀性可以和原文對照，基本是一致的，但更核心問題是 樂樂改寫方法，保護了文章內最要的東西，也就是很多自己改寫時候忽略掉的。。。
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樂樂  2013.10.30我已經讓樓主免費學習dofast了 如果滿意 他就付費繼續學習lelegai 如果不滿意什麼都不損失，不過希望樓主能在這裡回復一下感受

那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

a64913444 發表於 2013-10-30 11:44
! Y0 ~8 B) W. d: R8 Y  }4 N那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

是這樣的，樂樂老師昨晚說：如果我覺得滿意，那麼需要付1000元購買dofast和lelegai，如果不滿意，則不付錢。因為昨晚有事沒看，今天在單位裡，等我看完後我會把感受寫出來給大家看的。

樂樂 發表於 2013-10-30 00:20
5 j5 z4 S3 \5 u" I" T0 ]- R& ?原文：
. N8 r6 |. T5 eHaving baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the ba ...

+ E+ d+ `8 o% `3 ~- A1 P哈哈 原來我的錯誤主要是在定語從句上啊 看來要多複習複習定語從句的用法。which that what 巴拉巴拉的。。。這篇文章是我自己改寫的。是看完樂樂的教程後 馬上去實踐操作的。。樂樂覺得我寫的這篇文章 適合拿來後期的補充培訓。估計我犯的錯誤其他人也會犯 所以就壟斷了我的文章啦。。

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