lelegai和dofast

我來給你說說吧！
首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
3 g: x- ], f* ]# S' {Dofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教程+翻譯工具，基本上你能翻譯出，甚至是寫出基本上無語法錯誤的句子。
關於樂樂改寫，這個也是個很好的教程，首先你可以學習到改寫，並且能改出很好的文章。
其次這個不單單是改寫的教程，它甚至有很多方面都能延伸，至於延伸不多說，自己去延伸，嘿嘿！

自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
* s1 T8 e' n: o1 x4 a' W6 v& hBecause of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

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2 v. f5 H0 x$ @4 v; v$ y9 e: kBecause of their tiny size, parents should choose a car seat carefully that will cater to the needs of a preemie.

學員改寫：
- `$ U! h% H+ qBecause of their size which are tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.

這裡是我在教程中提到過，形容詞變定語從句，一定要加點料，
5 q1 V# ]6 `" i# f4 L( z因為是第一次改，所以他沒注意，
你看，我稍微加一個單詞
# R- @* J. t! U% Z5 {0 V. ?Because of their size which is comparatively tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
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aicheng262 發表於 2013-10-29 23:34
7 o) U- R# p+ D8 m! g+ D: o+ H我來給你說說吧！
首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
Dofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教 ...

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8 r, d+ C. ?) V* y- qIf needed, a small, rolled towel can be used to fill in any small spaces between the crotch strap and the baby to provide a snug fit.

學員改寫：
# Y: H6 I# d& r) `) uYou can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces which is small between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.

同樣問題也是出在形容詞轉定語從句
他是看完教程第一次改寫，所以這個點還沒有掌握太好
$ n7 a  s2 [; y# A, b$ y; c樂樂改專門支持論壇，可以免費給他提供點評服務的
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6 L+ [4 K% N! N$ E( D+ f5 mYou can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces that is not so big between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
就再次變得自然了

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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

原文：
" N4 u- n" H7 AHaving baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the baby's head from rolling around during transport.
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. q; |- u! A8 B6 |6 S7 E% zwhat baby support cushions have is cradle the body while supporting effectively for the baby head can keep your baby's head safe from rolling around during transport in your car.
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: W4 y% b. B/ w' m) @  N3 S這裡屬於原文稍微難一點，因為較長
6 w6 b- e6 S+ D, C; W( V4 G( xA can keep B from doing C
A = Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head
B = the baby's head
6 G& k0 e* B+ [/ L3 H! i. Ydoing C = rolling around during transport
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但是學員思路是挺好的，我們繼續按照此思路改寫
4 {% w0 \6 e. c8 QWhat we have is the baby support cushions cradling the body that can keep the baby's head from rolling around by supporting it during transport.
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這裡的改寫方法都是樂樂改寫中提到的，這樣改出的句子，可讀性可以和原文對照，基本是一致的，但更核心問題是 樂樂改寫方法，保護了文章內最要的東西，也就是很多自己改寫時候忽略掉的。。。
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樂樂  2013.10.30我已經讓樓主免費學習dofast了 如果滿意 他就付費繼續學習lelegai 如果不滿意什麼都不損失，不過希望樓主能在這裡回復一下感受

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那不是只用付lelegai呢。。
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a64913444 發表於 2013-10-30 11:44
# }! @; ?+ Z! P那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

是這樣的，樂樂老師昨晚說：如果我覺得滿意，那麼需要付1000元購買dofast和lelegai，如果不滿意，則不付錢。因為昨晚有事沒看，今天在單位裡，等我看完後我會把感受寫出來給大家看的。

樂樂 發表於 2013-10-30 00:20
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8 X5 n9 V2 A+ x8 [" Y6 n$ THaving baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the ba ...

. r9 l$ `* j/ ^哈哈 原來我的錯誤主要是在定語從句上啊 看來要多複習複習定語從句的用法。which that what 巴拉巴拉的。。。這篇文章是我自己改寫的。是看完樂樂的教程後 馬上去實踐操作的。。樂樂覺得我寫的這篇文章 適合拿來後期的補充培訓。估計我犯的錯誤其他人也會犯 所以就壟斷了我的文章啦。。
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