lelegai和dofast

我來給你說說吧！
( Z3 [' Y5 h8 n+ @' I首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
Dofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教程+翻譯工具，基本上你能翻譯出，甚至是寫出基本上無語法錯誤的句子。
! Y& ^8 S4 t% ^, j  I關於樂樂改寫，這個也是個很好的教程，首先你可以學習到改寫，並且能改出很好的文章。
其次這個不單單是改寫的教程，它甚至有很多方面都能延伸，至於延伸不多說，自己去延伸，嘿嘿！
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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
8 F4 M& L  R- [* Q; a4 UBecause of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

原文：
5 Q1 g. a: ]+ }$ j) nBecause of their tiny size, parents should choose a car seat carefully that will cater to the needs of a preemie.

學員改寫：
Because of their size which are tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
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2 p3 s) b1 v0 X1 X. u這裡是我在教程中提到過，形容詞變定語從句，一定要加點料，
因為是第一次改，所以他沒注意，
, X7 m( E9 e1 F, \& x' E你看，我稍微加一個單詞
Because of their size which is comparatively tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
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aicheng262 發表於 2013-10-29 23:34
/ M0 [6 i4 ~% c# v8 i! N  w* O( r" N我來給你說說吧！
首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
9 R* ?6 d2 d2 s' N! {Dofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教 ...

8 E, S1 j! B" Q' |原文：
# U) L+ j  ?  X* ]0 _# PIf needed, a small, rolled towel can be used to fill in any small spaces between the crotch strap and the baby to provide a snug fit.
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/ q' n7 \+ H- P6 n$ DYou can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces which is small between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
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4 j; `# Y; j, N5 x' i: I. u同樣問題也是出在形容詞轉定語從句
他是看完教程第一次改寫，所以這個點還沒有掌握太好
樂樂改專門支持論壇，可以免費給他提供點評服務的
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  c9 ]% Y- w# b3 p1 f: k" {3 CYou can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces that is not so big between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

& j1 t: \% r; i1 O" _- F1 l7 L& N原文：
. \" J3 j" t5 v4 Q) tHaving baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the baby's head from rolling around during transport.
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# e  G9 q" y6 S& kwhat baby support cushions have is cradle the body while supporting effectively for the baby head can keep your baby's head safe from rolling around during transport in your car.
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這裡屬於原文稍微難一點，因為較長
A can keep B from doing C
A = Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head
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doing C = rolling around during transport
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8 d$ b# `. l' F: s- O7 Q" v但是學員思路是挺好的，我們繼續按照此思路改寫
& B# s7 `$ d, p3 |; x0 Q4 Z5 }9 U1 K  zWhat we have is the baby support cushions cradling the body that can keep the baby's head from rolling around by supporting it during transport.
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7 G0 j. H; k  G3 Y! m! x, N1 _這裡的改寫方法都是樂樂改寫中提到的，這樣改出的句子，可讀性可以和原文對照，基本是一致的，但更核心問題是 樂樂改寫方法，保護了文章內最要的東西，也就是很多自己改寫時候忽略掉的。。。

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樂樂  2013.10.30我已經讓樓主免費學習dofast了 如果滿意 他就付費繼續學習lelegai 如果不滿意什麼都不損失，不過希望樓主能在這裡回復一下感受

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那不是只用付lelegai呢。。
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a64913444 發表於 2013-10-30 11:44
8 h8 Q+ ?% g6 D/ I8 e那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

) T" i5 H, A4 j( H1 N" o2 ~是這樣的，樂樂老師昨晚說：如果我覺得滿意，那麼需要付1000元購買dofast和lelegai，如果不滿意，則不付錢。因為昨晚有事沒看，今天在單位裡，等我看完後我會把感受寫出來給大家看的。

樂樂 發表於 2013-10-30 00:20
原文：
Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the ba ...

) y2 t. k0 _% t哈哈 原來我的錯誤主要是在定語從句上啊 看來要多複習複習定語從句的用法。which that what 巴拉巴拉的。。。這篇文章是我自己改寫的。是看完樂樂的教程後 馬上去實踐操作的。。樂樂覺得我寫的這篇文章 適合拿來後期的補充培訓。估計我犯的錯誤其他人也會犯 所以就壟斷了我的文章啦。。
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