lelegai和dofast

我來給你說說吧！
3 U3 T. K, m1 E- F& s' k首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
7 [9 b& {/ o, NDofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教程+翻譯工具，基本上你能翻譯出，甚至是寫出基本上無語法錯誤的句子。
關於樂樂改寫，這個也是個很好的教程，首先你可以學習到改寫，並且能改出很好的文章。
其次這個不單單是改寫的教程，它甚至有很多方面都能延伸，至於延伸不多說，自己去延伸，嘿嘿！
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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

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Because of their tiny size, parents should choose a car seat carefully that will cater to the needs of a preemie.

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" h: o, [7 H2 \7 j" o! P2 lBecause of their size which are tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
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1 P9 }, i6 b) ^1 a這裡是我在教程中提到過，形容詞變定語從句，一定要加點料，
' U7 p. J; h& A* \7 d因為是第一次改，所以他沒注意，
3 Y; Z( C/ T5 t! q4 a) J) j. W你看，我稍微加一個單詞
Because of their size which is comparatively tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
就自然了。
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aicheng262 發表於 2013-10-29 23:34
我來給你說說吧！
4 \. h$ ]; M! Q2 D# _: o; T& ~首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
Dofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教 ...

原文：
" S7 i3 h# c$ {, t* fIf needed, a small, rolled towel can be used to fill in any small spaces between the crotch strap and the baby to provide a snug fit.
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學員改寫：
9 A" W' G6 w& }+ T; n) ZYou can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces which is small between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.

" K3 N* U9 ]0 H$ \* k同樣問題也是出在形容詞轉定語從句
* _- K' e  o# ?; o/ d他是看完教程第一次改寫，所以這個點還沒有掌握太好
樂樂改專門支持論壇，可以免費給他提供點評服務的
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! m5 I& V' R1 C5 d0 V" u& uYou can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces that is not so big between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
# w" S. k8 w0 c* g  [Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

原文：
/ ?3 b9 ]2 R2 P, {, K+ o6 V5 J1 v9 PHaving baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the baby's head from rolling around during transport.
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what baby support cushions have is cradle the body while supporting effectively for the baby head can keep your baby's head safe from rolling around during transport in your car.
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這裡屬於原文稍微難一點，因為較長
3 ]! e9 }9 C6 L, N  z4 J4 @+ Z  H+ @A can keep B from doing C
A = Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head
5 O  R1 [% O% k; o  b3 l/ \0 mB = the baby's head
doing C = rolling around during transport

0 E4 j2 T* S' j但是學員思路是挺好的，我們繼續按照此思路改寫
5 ^$ R! j* u( e# X' Y# S- M  @What we have is the baby support cushions cradling the body that can keep the baby's head from rolling around by supporting it during transport.

這裡的改寫方法都是樂樂改寫中提到的，這樣改出的句子，可讀性可以和原文對照，基本是一致的，但更核心問題是 樂樂改寫方法，保護了文章內最要的東西，也就是很多自己改寫時候忽略掉的。。。

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樂樂  2013.10.30我已經讓樓主免費學習dofast了 如果滿意 他就付費繼續學習lelegai 如果不滿意什麼都不損失，不過希望樓主能在這裡回復一下感受

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那不是只用付lelegai呢。。
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a64913444 發表於 2013-10-30 11:44
9 \1 `: N4 c/ v& i- F那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

是這樣的，樂樂老師昨晚說：如果我覺得滿意，那麼需要付1000元購買dofast和lelegai，如果不滿意，則不付錢。因為昨晚有事沒看，今天在單位裡，等我看完後我會把感受寫出來給大家看的。

樂樂 發表於 2013-10-30 00:20
原文：
Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the ba ...

, C+ G/ f4 b3 ?哈哈 原來我的錯誤主要是在定語從句上啊 看來要多複習複習定語從句的用法。which that what 巴拉巴拉的。。。這篇文章是我自己改寫的。是看完樂樂的教程後 馬上去實踐操作的。。樂樂覺得我寫的這篇文章 適合拿來後期的補充培訓。估計我犯的錯誤其他人也會犯 所以就壟斷了我的文章啦。。
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