lelegai和dofast

我來給你說說吧！
& |0 B$ U. i3 h; k9 W首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
Dofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教程+翻譯工具，基本上你能翻譯出，甚至是寫出基本上無語法錯誤的句子。
關於樂樂改寫，這個也是個很好的教程，首先你可以學習到改寫，並且能改出很好的文章。
其次這個不單單是改寫的教程，它甚至有很多方面都能延伸，至於延伸不多說，自己去延伸，嘿嘿！

自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

原文：
Because of their tiny size, parents should choose a car seat carefully that will cater to the needs of a preemie.
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1 h- f7 V+ U) g- |. }0 s! tBecause of their size which are tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.

9 M# U) h+ ^; ~2 y8 a& X. n" L這裡是我在教程中提到過，形容詞變定語從句，一定要加點料，
% Q4 u8 q6 t) M8 I8 W  Q因為是第一次改，所以他沒注意，
. G$ q4 x3 z0 B你看，我稍微加一個單詞
Because of their size which is comparatively tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
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aicheng262 發表於 2013-10-29 23:34
1 p. }# W6 W* `$ c我來給你說說吧！
首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
* r4 i, q, _' j5 k. qDofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教 ...

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. [( d1 T! e; M/ d  gIf needed, a small, rolled towel can be used to fill in any small spaces between the crotch strap and the baby to provide a snug fit.
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You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces which is small between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.

同樣問題也是出在形容詞轉定語從句
9 x4 x+ M/ @$ K* L% [他是看完教程第一次改寫，所以這個點還沒有掌握太好
# K( f5 W  r  g: u; }; z樂樂改專門支持論壇，可以免費給他提供點評服務的
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) y4 y1 R+ }0 EYou can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces that is not so big between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
就再次變得自然了
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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
& M9 J; g/ f% @/ k& @1 Q: p! _Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

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Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the baby's head from rolling around during transport.
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what baby support cushions have is cradle the body while supporting effectively for the baby head can keep your baby's head safe from rolling around during transport in your car.

8 E% |4 Q  ~) M9 S這裡屬於原文稍微難一點，因為較長
A can keep B from doing C
5 c# ]( T7 ?5 o! U; Q. g2 @/ |A = Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head
3 V& t) y- X9 o" S. D6 e: WB = the baby's head
  G+ y1 g4 n" f- H/ p1 y, Vdoing C = rolling around during transport

. t+ j$ ?, F, a/ P' W; m9 X' L& {& B但是學員思路是挺好的，我們繼續按照此思路改寫
9 D5 v: L2 X  T; N8 w, sWhat we have is the baby support cushions cradling the body that can keep the baby's head from rolling around by supporting it during transport.

, g9 z5 N' l9 K4 n9 o  v& R% U這裡的改寫方法都是樂樂改寫中提到的，這樣改出的句子，可讀性可以和原文對照，基本是一致的，但更核心問題是 樂樂改寫方法，保護了文章內最要的東西，也就是很多自己改寫時候忽略掉的。。。
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樂樂  2013.10.30我已經讓樓主免費學習dofast了 如果滿意 他就付費繼續學習lelegai 如果不滿意什麼都不損失，不過希望樓主能在這裡回復一下感受

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那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

a64913444 發表於 2013-10-30 11:44
那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

" K& H* d8 S+ q7 e6 T: Z是這樣的，樂樂老師昨晚說：如果我覺得滿意，那麼需要付1000元購買dofast和lelegai，如果不滿意，則不付錢。因為昨晚有事沒看，今天在單位裡，等我看完後我會把感受寫出來給大家看的。
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樂樂 發表於 2013-10-30 00:20
原文：
4 K1 v- V5 H+ }' c3 ~/ AHaving baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the ba ...

哈哈 原來我的錯誤主要是在定語從句上啊 看來要多複習複習定語從句的用法。which that what 巴拉巴拉的。。。這篇文章是我自己改寫的。是看完樂樂的教程後 馬上去實踐操作的。。樂樂覺得我寫的這篇文章 適合拿來後期的補充培訓。估計我犯的錯誤其他人也會犯 所以就壟斷了我的文章啦。。
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