lelegai和dofast

我來給你說說吧！
: J7 Z9 z, m$ n& V, Z* s( s首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
1 J. P2 J0 j+ `2 k( c) L, i6 nDofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教程+翻譯工具，基本上你能翻譯出，甚至是寫出基本上無語法錯誤的句子。
; f- h; {9 z5 h$ b關於樂樂改寫，這個也是個很好的教程，首先你可以學習到改寫，並且能改出很好的文章。
7 Z' _; ]; ?+ Q4 T# {其次這個不單單是改寫的教程，它甚至有很多方面都能延伸，至於延伸不多說，自己去延伸，嘿嘿！

自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

原文：
. c, x( f: p7 N6 u5 k  cBecause of their tiny size, parents should choose a car seat carefully that will cater to the needs of a preemie.

學員改寫：
* \5 q  d0 R" r. TBecause of their size which are tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.

! C+ K( n; u7 X8 E* H; P7 C這裡是我在教程中提到過，形容詞變定語從句，一定要加點料，
因為是第一次改，所以他沒注意，
你看，我稍微加一個單詞
Because of their size which is comparatively tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
就自然了。
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aicheng262 發表於 2013-10-29 23:34
% |; X1 F3 [+ r! T2 A! W8 c我來給你說說吧！
0 I* m( h" X1 p7 V( Z首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
Dofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教 ...

原文：
$ c( y9 ?7 o8 ~3 A# X; o$ UIf needed, a small, rolled towel can be used to fill in any small spaces between the crotch strap and the baby to provide a snug fit.

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You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces which is small between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.

同樣問題也是出在形容詞轉定語從句
  k9 d- r5 @  X% W* Z+ B  D他是看完教程第一次改寫，所以這個點還沒有掌握太好
: z- Z# q) }, _  E樂樂改專門支持論壇，可以免費給他提供點評服務的
稍微加一點料
You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces that is not so big between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
就再次變得自然了

自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
8 X0 O8 h4 ?5 x+ F( XBecause of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

原文：
2 F' D$ s1 G* Y4 _% m& E$ cHaving baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the baby's head from rolling around during transport.
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學員改寫：
what baby support cushions have is cradle the body while supporting effectively for the baby head can keep your baby's head safe from rolling around during transport in your car.
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% u& ^- z1 _8 ]這裡屬於原文稍微難一點，因為較長
A can keep B from doing C
2 s& c; o; z) k& k/ K3 \3 _A = Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head
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doing C = rolling around during transport

但是學員思路是挺好的，我們繼續按照此思路改寫
What we have is the baby support cushions cradling the body that can keep the baby's head from rolling around by supporting it during transport.
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/ F; v9 q0 f( M! F/ C9 }! H! U這裡的改寫方法都是樂樂改寫中提到的，這樣改出的句子，可讀性可以和原文對照，基本是一致的，但更核心問題是 樂樂改寫方法，保護了文章內最要的東西，也就是很多自己改寫時候忽略掉的。。。
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樂樂  2013.10.30我已經讓樓主免費學習dofast了 如果滿意 他就付費繼續學習lelegai 如果不滿意什麼都不損失，不過希望樓主能在這裡回復一下感受

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那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

a64913444 發表於 2013-10-30 11:44
那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

2 _6 J" V; @# J是這樣的，樂樂老師昨晚說：如果我覺得滿意，那麼需要付1000元購買dofast和lelegai，如果不滿意，則不付錢。因為昨晚有事沒看，今天在單位裡，等我看完後我會把感受寫出來給大家看的。

樂樂 發表於 2013-10-30 00:20
* u# P3 M# ?* E+ k9 ~1 `原文：
5 }" T3 e# w4 H7 J; |# F9 i, EHaving baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the ba ...

0 [0 a) e2 u' [- m2 ^- s哈哈 原來我的錯誤主要是在定語從句上啊 看來要多複習複習定語從句的用法。which that what 巴拉巴拉的。。。這篇文章是我自己改寫的。是看完樂樂的教程後 馬上去實踐操作的。。樂樂覺得我寫的這篇文章 適合拿來後期的補充培訓。估計我犯的錯誤其他人也會犯 所以就壟斷了我的文章啦。。
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