lelegai和dofast

我來給你說說吧！
首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
Dofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教程+翻譯工具，基本上你能翻譯出，甚至是寫出基本上無語法錯誤的句子。
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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

原文：
& p$ W  ?0 C) k: O; {  NBecause of their tiny size, parents should choose a car seat carefully that will cater to the needs of a preemie.

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* f' X: r; D: x( A; E* g5 i5 bBecause of their size which are tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.

這裡是我在教程中提到過，形容詞變定語從句，一定要加點料，
因為是第一次改，所以他沒注意，
你看，我稍微加一個單詞
Because of their size which is comparatively tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
就自然了。
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aicheng262 發表於 2013-10-29 23:34
# @( q& e& U3 a9 h7 G. [我來給你說說吧！
首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
8 q! A$ z0 A0 o* s( JDofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教 ...

原文：
* H: g, `. C. \* {  @& xIf needed, a small, rolled towel can be used to fill in any small spaces between the crotch strap and the baby to provide a snug fit.
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學員改寫：
( T7 s! X4 \* G" r) uYou can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces which is small between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
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同樣問題也是出在形容詞轉定語從句
他是看完教程第一次改寫，所以這個點還沒有掌握太好
% T! w, v0 I; Z$ G樂樂改專門支持論壇，可以免費給他提供點評服務的
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; k8 p% l, O; fYou can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces that is not so big between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

原文：
( M. F( {% Q/ j! b- I) AHaving baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the baby's head from rolling around during transport.

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2 u" z3 @: f# Rwhat baby support cushions have is cradle the body while supporting effectively for the baby head can keep your baby's head safe from rolling around during transport in your car.
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這裡屬於原文稍微難一點，因為較長
7 i+ s, v) t3 @; |6 M1 ^2 l. ZA can keep B from doing C
A = Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head
5 ^6 n9 q& j. }6 j7 ~B = the baby's head
1 c* Y* j. d. J, {4 {- q1 Ndoing C = rolling around during transport

但是學員思路是挺好的，我們繼續按照此思路改寫
9 D( C; ~9 ?7 M5 a% D' KWhat we have is the baby support cushions cradling the body that can keep the baby's head from rolling around by supporting it during transport.
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" t  j4 Z+ D4 f) Z這裡的改寫方法都是樂樂改寫中提到的，這樣改出的句子，可讀性可以和原文對照，基本是一致的，但更核心問題是 樂樂改寫方法，保護了文章內最要的東西，也就是很多自己改寫時候忽略掉的。。。

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樂樂  2013.10.30我已經讓樓主免費學習dofast了 如果滿意 他就付費繼續學習lelegai 如果不滿意什麼都不損失，不過希望樓主能在這裡回復一下感受

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a64913444 發表於 2013-10-30 11:44
$ W3 E9 j3 c6 B  e5 _* O! M8 K- H: C那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

! V% Z! ^. ^( [7 ^; \( f: e是這樣的，樂樂老師昨晚說：如果我覺得滿意，那麼需要付1000元購買dofast和lelegai，如果不滿意，則不付錢。因為昨晚有事沒看，今天在單位裡，等我看完後我會把感受寫出來給大家看的。
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樂樂 發表於 2013-10-30 00:20
8 I  i4 z! l& W2 {7 t原文：
Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the ba ...

) }5 a: H3 h- A5 A/ d' h/ s) Y$ [5 I哈哈 原來我的錯誤主要是在定語從句上啊 看來要多複習複習定語從句的用法。which that what 巴拉巴拉的。。。這篇文章是我自己改寫的。是看完樂樂的教程後 馬上去實踐操作的。。樂樂覺得我寫的這篇文章 適合拿來後期的補充培訓。估計我犯的錯誤其他人也會犯 所以就壟斷了我的文章啦。。
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