lelegai和dofast

我來給你說說吧！
9 x* Z! a5 J6 e7 }* Q- M8 c8 y首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
5 z* h& _7 [' G! q  O7 v  O  P8 VDofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教程+翻譯工具，基本上你能翻譯出，甚至是寫出基本上無語法錯誤的句子。
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其次這個不單單是改寫的教程，它甚至有很多方面都能延伸，至於延伸不多說，自己去延伸，嘿嘿！
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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
5 p( J$ x# h9 NBecause of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

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% U0 ~/ K- g. x1 M, d( R! qBecause of their tiny size, parents should choose a car seat carefully that will cater to the needs of a preemie.

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Because of their size which are tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.

這裡是我在教程中提到過，形容詞變定語從句，一定要加點料，
$ ~1 @( j3 Q$ }0 _因為是第一次改，所以他沒注意，
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Because of their size which is comparatively tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
就自然了。
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aicheng262 發表於 2013-10-29 23:34
我來給你說說吧！
首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
Dofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教 ...

原文：
If needed, a small, rolled towel can be used to fill in any small spaces between the crotch strap and the baby to provide a snug fit.
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You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces which is small between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.

同樣問題也是出在形容詞轉定語從句
他是看完教程第一次改寫，所以這個點還沒有掌握太好
- x- [8 a' k. Q3 ~9 Y樂樂改專門支持論壇，可以免費給他提供點評服務的
稍微加一點料
( ?  f' r) i, b) |' U  i( m4 FYou can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces that is not so big between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
就再次變得自然了

自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

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Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the baby's head from rolling around during transport.

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/ M; w2 u: z7 g) G* Twhat baby support cushions have is cradle the body while supporting effectively for the baby head can keep your baby's head safe from rolling around during transport in your car.

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A can keep B from doing C
8 H* a8 l% y* U6 |- uA = Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head
8 u/ ^( a/ P+ w& dB = the baby's head
6 _0 g9 ?& e8 L8 \doing C = rolling around during transport
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但是學員思路是挺好的，我們繼續按照此思路改寫
2 L) L, ~" g% CWhat we have is the baby support cushions cradling the body that can keep the baby's head from rolling around by supporting it during transport.

( ?$ ]4 h5 K1 H2 |這裡的改寫方法都是樂樂改寫中提到的，這樣改出的句子，可讀性可以和原文對照，基本是一致的，但更核心問題是 樂樂改寫方法，保護了文章內最要的東西，也就是很多自己改寫時候忽略掉的。。。
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樂樂  2013.10.30我已經讓樓主免費學習dofast了 如果滿意 他就付費繼續學習lelegai 如果不滿意什麼都不損失，不過希望樓主能在這裡回復一下感受

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那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

a64913444 發表於 2013-10-30 11:44
, u- u9 V4 g' e: I  W7 L那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

是這樣的，樂樂老師昨晚說：如果我覺得滿意，那麼需要付1000元購買dofast和lelegai，如果不滿意，則不付錢。因為昨晚有事沒看，今天在單位裡，等我看完後我會把感受寫出來給大家看的。
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樂樂 發表於 2013-10-30 00:20
原文：
( u# u7 n( S' j5 S' O6 cHaving baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the ba ...

哈哈 原來我的錯誤主要是在定語從句上啊 看來要多複習複習定語從句的用法。which that what 巴拉巴拉的。。。這篇文章是我自己改寫的。是看完樂樂的教程後 馬上去實踐操作的。。樂樂覺得我寫的這篇文章 適合拿來後期的補充培訓。估計我犯的錯誤其他人也會犯 所以就壟斷了我的文章啦。。

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