lelegai和dofast

我來給你說說吧！
: A2 p+ j2 S1 P8 D& o) g2 y- z首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
, i7 M# h5 [' U/ q2 G- B6 yDofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教程+翻譯工具，基本上你能翻譯出，甚至是寫出基本上無語法錯誤的句子。
關於樂樂改寫，這個也是個很好的教程，首先你可以學習到改寫，並且能改出很好的文章。
其次這個不單單是改寫的教程，它甚至有很多方面都能延伸，至於延伸不多說，自己去延伸，嘿嘿！

自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

原文：
Because of their tiny size, parents should choose a car seat carefully that will cater to the needs of a preemie.

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1 W, U% O4 d1 Q& W" iBecause of their size which are tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
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; k* y% j/ a" T4 z8 e這裡是我在教程中提到過，形容詞變定語從句，一定要加點料，
( \( {2 a( \. ^4 k: m5 h; K因為是第一次改，所以他沒注意，
! s# e4 D8 z. i5 }+ t你看，我稍微加一個單詞
% e0 z6 O( k4 n) ?Because of their size which is comparatively tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
就自然了。

aicheng262 發表於 2013-10-29 23:34
我來給你說說吧！
0 q: r8 M: m7 B9 v6 C8 v' Q首先我是dofast的用戶，也是樂樂改的用戶。
Dofast真的是一個翻譯很好的教程，看完教 ...

4 ]8 j; ?2 ^6 c0 k; [& A: d7 a原文：
) }. A+ d" r4 UIf needed, a small, rolled towel can be used to fill in any small spaces between the crotch strap and the baby to provide a snug fit.
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學員改寫：
4 H+ `: G5 S% u9 u7 A* FYou can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces which is small between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.

5 ~+ \, [- [  X* i3 {  q同樣問題也是出在形容詞轉定語從句
6 V7 \* ^! K# F$ |$ p! X他是看完教程第一次改寫，所以這個點還沒有掌握太好
/ B! w2 j4 _* A% U' I/ w樂樂改專門支持論壇，可以免費給他提供點評服務的
稍微加一點料
' n$ r' m$ V3 xYou can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces that is not so big between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
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自由之路 發表於 2013-10-29 22:42
7 W, r( C9 o  E7 UBecause of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

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Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the baby's head from rolling around during transport.

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- E) ^4 s' P1 ?what baby support cushions have is cradle the body while supporting effectively for the baby head can keep your baby's head safe from rolling around during transport in your car.

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1 g* H3 n; f: P# x2 p& U. dA = Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head
B = the baby's head
doing C = rolling around during transport
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/ N7 h# A* ^2 ?" o2 m& T0 R但是學員思路是挺好的，我們繼續按照此思路改寫
/ l. {$ z+ E- a" Z6 t7 qWhat we have is the baby support cushions cradling the body that can keep the baby's head from rolling around by supporting it during transport.

這裡的改寫方法都是樂樂改寫中提到的，這樣改出的句子，可讀性可以和原文對照，基本是一致的，但更核心問題是 樂樂改寫方法，保護了文章內最要的東西，也就是很多自己改寫時候忽略掉的。。。
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樂樂  2013.10.30我已經讓樓主免費學習dofast了 如果滿意 他就付費繼續學習lelegai 如果不滿意什麼都不損失，不過希望樓主能在這裡回復一下感受

2 o1 V) z& E& ?6 [) s; p那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

a64913444 發表於 2013-10-30 11:44
* c  U+ P) O$ `2 C那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

是這樣的，樂樂老師昨晚說：如果我覺得滿意，那麼需要付1000元購買dofast和lelegai，如果不滿意，則不付錢。因為昨晚有事沒看，今天在單位裡，等我看完後我會把感受寫出來給大家看的。
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樂樂 發表於 2013-10-30 00:20
原文：
Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the ba ...

哈哈 原來我的錯誤主要是在定語從句上啊 看來要多複習複習定語從句的用法。which that what 巴拉巴拉的。。。這篇文章是我自己改寫的。是看完樂樂的教程後 馬上去實踐操作的。。樂樂覺得我寫的這篇文章 適合拿來後期的補充培訓。估計我犯的錯誤其他人也會犯 所以就壟斷了我的文章啦。。
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