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發表於 2012-9-7 00:15:11 | 顯示全部樓層 |閱讀模式
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Fight Cancer With These 10 Foods4 V" n! ?+ X9 U

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$ Y0 Z. v0 W/ P# DMore than a third of all cancers could be prevented by changes in diet and exercise. One of the most important things you can do to reduce your risk is lose excess weight - and one of the best ways to lose weight is through a filling, fiber-rich diet including plenty of fruits and vegetables.
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Keywords:5 M5 @0 I4 J7 b" F# X/ \
Fight Cancer With These 10 Foods
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More than a third of all cancers could be prevented by changes in diet and exercise. One of the most important things you can do to reduce your risk is lose excess weight - and one of the best ways to lose weight is through a filling, fiber-rich diet including plenty of fruits and vegetables.
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7 d) F6 ]' i0 P1 N% TBut that's not the reason why the National Cancer Institute recently approved the dietary guidance: "Diets rich in fruits and vegetables may reduce the risk of some types of cancer and other chronic diseases." These foods are packed with antioxidants and other compounds that protect your DNA and fight free radical damage. 3 V( O$ j. h8 I! x4 S; i

8 u+ B5 h$ E3 f# TSince these substances work synergistically, it's best to eat a variety of fruits and vegetables rather than relying on one particular produce item to serve as a magic bullet against disease. That said, recent studies have uncovered specific benefits in the following foods that would recommend making them a part of any healthy diet.
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+ L! k) y7 V- S- X) |2 s1. Tomatoes: Lycopene, also found in watermelon and pink grapefruit, has been linked to lower risk of prostate, ovarian and cervical cancer. It also targets the free radical that is implicated in lung and digestive cancers. * h8 k  H' r" z8 y2 o1 F% o* ~

. P( `; D. L, \2. Broccoli sprouts: One forkful triggers a cascade of antioxidant activity that lasts for days. ( `9 S0 V. G$ c( S5 n" {

( r1 ?: o  p1 C9 [4 P2 W! p3. Berries: Blueberries, cranberries, cherries, raspberries, strawberries, grapes - all rich in anthocyanins that repair and protect DNA.- ]5 c- F  p  k1 I1 E
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4. Soybeans: Isoflavones such as genistein may help prevent and treat prostate cancer and may reduce breast cancer risk
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5. Tea: Both black and green contain powerful compounds shown in countless studies to lower the risk of several types of cancer.
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6. Pumpkin: This unsung super-food is a super-rich source of both beta-carotene and alpha-carotene, two hard-working carotenoids that combat lung and ovarian cancer.
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# x% B3 U# w; L  v- N7. Spinach: Popeye's favorite may help ward off cancers of the liver, ovaries, colon and prostate. The active antioxidant lutein is also found in kale and other leafy greens.
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( M. ]4 B% C1 @, @' }$ m4 |8 m1 Y) I: Y7 G8. Garlic: Allium veggies (which also include onions and scallions) work to get your body's own antioxidant defense systems in gear. This process provides protective benefits against stomach, esophageal and breast cancers. 2 }3 `; ?! ~& i
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9. Pineapple: The enzyme bromelain may inhibit the growth of malignant cells in both lung and breast cancer, while the phenolic compounds also provide a protective benefit. , }9 k* ?, m- R5 [4 n/ J( G( U& X
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10. Apples: Can one a day help keep cancer at bay? Studies show quercetin may reduce the risk of lung cancer and impede growth of prostate cancer cells. Other antioxidants together with pectin help halt colon and liver cancer cell replication.
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8 D  i5 v: ?1 o7 KTen Enemies of Cancer
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6 E; H7 }. x; o0 ~) m8 HChanging in diet and doing exercise could prevent at least one third of cancers .One of the most significant things you can do to decrease your danger is lose surplus weight - and one of the most excellent way to lose weight is through a filling, fiber-rich eating habits together with a great deal  of costermongers  and greenstuffs. $ d6 |2 [% c+ p! k

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' Z% m& f" W' M* {4 dHowever the National Cancer Institute lately authorized the dietetical instructions: "Diets rich in costermongers and greenstuffs could cut down the venture of many kinds  of cancers  and other chronic illnesses."." These foods comprise with antioxidants and other admixtures that safeguard our DNA and fight free radical scathe.
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Since these ingredients work synergistically, We should  eat a variety of costermongers  and greenstuffs  to counteract illnesses and using this method will be better than  depending  on one specific produce item.   Tt is said that most of  research haven't covered detailed advantages in the following foods and  would be nominated making these foods as some kinds of  healthy diets.
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1. Tomatoes: There is many Lycopene in the tomatoes and  it will be also  found in watermelon and pink grapefruit, It is benefit for prostate patients, ovarian and cervical cancer. It also protects  the free radical that is implicated in lung and digestive cancers.
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2. Broccoli sprouts: One forkful triggers a cascade of antioxidant activity that lasts for days.
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3. Berries: Blueberries, cranberries, cherries, raspberries, strawberries, grapes . they  all rich in anthocyanins that mend and defend DNA.
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4. Soybeans:We can find   Isoflavones in soybean and  genistein could  help safeguard  and cure prostate cancer . It also has a function that  may reduce breast cancer danger.7 B' G8 f$ T  g% |
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5. Tea: Both black and green rich in  ample intermixtures indicated in many  research to reduce the danger of two or three sorts of cancer. 1 a) t7 X  {5 x8 M* a0 a0 o

& @5 r& n. G1 C; e6. Pumpkin: This unsung super-food is a super-profuse resource of both beta-carotene and alpha-carotene,combat lung and ovarian cancer like this  two hard-working carotenoids best . % O4 y8 y: k0 F( i( K7 X

* }5 M2 W9 d5 q# @5 w. d7. Spinach: Popeye's favorite may help keep away from cancers of the liver, ovaries, colon and prostate. The kale and other leafy greens also contain the lively antioxidant Iutein.$ G4 Y  ~3 @( V2 E

7 U- e7 r7 d9 O- Z8. Garlic: Allium veggies (such as  onions and scallions) work to get your body's own antioxidant defense systems in gear. This procedure offers defensive profits against stomach, esophageal and breast cancers. ( G9 k3 e& M2 z1 z2 O5 p# }- T

! t( K' u+ d% Y6 w, Q: W9. Pineapple: The growth of malignant cells may be inhibited by enzyme bromelain in both lung and breast cancer, while the phenolic intermixture also offer a defensive profit. ) n& A8 i+ v& F
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10. Apples: Illnesses will keep away from me if I eat an apple a day . Researches  explain quercetin can  decrease the danger of lung cancer and impede growth of prostate cancer cells. Other antioxidants together with pectin assist halt colon and liver cancer cell duplication.8 n/ U* Z4 _5 e) @+ K, e$ d

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1 s0 T6 h3 C8 ^( t5 l4 n3 S一個學外語的朋友幫忙改的,因為本人的外語能力實在有限。所以麻煩懂英語的朋友鑒定一下,謝謝。

發表於 2012-9-7 09:39:19 | 顯示全部樓層
去1gai.cn看下吧,如果是收費的,那最好換人。

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發表於 2012-9-7 12:35:14 | 顯示全部樓層
還不錯

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發表於 2012-9-7 12:47:29 | 顯示全部樓層
句子結構改了不少,就是詞語換得少了點。

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發表於 2012-9-7 14:39:00 | 顯示全部樓層
語法有些不通順的地方。但是我有一點不明白的是,那麼多國外外包文章的,還找國人是為何呢。時間太多?
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 樓主| 發表於 2012-9-7 17:44:11 | 顯示全部樓層
本帖最後由 kapitu 於 2012-9-7 17:45 編輯 & x) w% {' l! T+ ?
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1 ~" x# }8 C, W" q% A0 U% n    因為國外外包的話需要成本啊,我這邊的兩個朋友都是免費的幫的,而我們之間關係屬於非常非常好的那種。不會有什麼因素會影響到文章的供應。
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 樓主| 發表於 2012-9-7 17:46:25 | 顯示全部樓層
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2 K: G/ w$ |5 g. ^% u  m    他全部都是手動改寫,易改這個軟件是我昨天才告訴他的。她說這個軟件不錯,希望對她有很大幫助。
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發表於 2012-9-10 09:54:16 | 顯示全部樓層
回復  cjyzpcl
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    因為國外外包的話需要成本啊,我這邊的兩個朋友都是免費的幫的,而我們之間關係屬於 ...0 y/ X5 \* l& K0 F, T
kapitu 發表於 2012-9-7 17:44

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    你朋友還真閒啊,哈哈
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發表於 2012-9-14 16:24:27 | 顯示全部樓層
我覺得比我寫的好多了
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發表於 2013-6-26 19:05:43 | 顯示全部樓層
說實在話,光看改寫後的標題,我就覺得這文章改的不好
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原文是 ten foods,你標題改後成了ten enemies,這真不合適
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